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8:44 AM, Monday November 9th 2020

Hey hey! I’ll be looking through your submission today~

Starting off, your superimposed lines look alright. They’re mostly smooth (the arcing ones not so much; remember that it’s far more important for them to be confident, than it is for them to stick to the guideline), and properly lined up at the start, but not always of a consistent trajectory, so be a little more careful in regards to that. The ghosted lines are a little difficult to judge, what with their start/end points being x’s, rather than dots. I’m glad to see that this isn’t the case for the rest of the submission. As for them, they look mostly straight, save for at the end. Be a little less conscious of the end point, if you can. We’d rather your lines were straight, but off, than wobbly, but accurate. This aspect of them seems to be much better in the planes exercise, though- well done.

The table of ellipses exercise is not quite there, unfortunately. The issue is, same as previous, a focus on accuracy, over confidence. In an effort to not overshoot their respective frames, and for their rotations to be as tight as possible, your ellipses have become wobbly. But this is the opposite of what we’d like. We’d like them to be smooth, and rounded, and if they are, their accuracy is of no concern to us. The ellipses in planes exercise has a similar issue, though your ellipses here are quite rounded, so it seems like you’re at least not skimping on your ghosting. As for your funnels, these looks good, in the sense that your ellipses are snug, and properly cut into two equal, symmetrical halves by their respective axes. I’d recommend going through them no more than 2 times, though, if you can.

The plotted perspective exercise looks nice. The rough perspective exercise has a few issues, though it’s mostly nicely done. Your linework is confident, but the presence of automatic reinforcing is an issue. Recall (from the ghosted lines section) that each line is to be drawn once, and only once, regardless of how it turns out. Adding more ink to a mistake doesn’t hide it- quite the contrary, it makes it stand out. As for the convergences, the 2 sets of lines that should be at infinity are, and the 1 set that should converge does make an effort to do so, though it could be better. Know that you don’t need to stick to your original guesses, here. Once you’ve got a point down, ghost it all the way to the horizon, to see where it intersects it. If you find it to be unsatisfactory, replace it. You can do that with your points, just not with your lines. The rotated boxes exercise looks fantastic (though you’ve forgotten to draw through the 4 corner-most boxes.) Your linework is confident, your boxes snug, and comfortable rotating, and you’ve even gone through the trouble of adding some hatching. My only recommendation for next time is to, coupled with your knowledge of boxes you’ll have gotten from the box challenge, take some time to consider why these lines are behaving the way they are. The organic perspective exercise looks nice. Your boxes are solid, they increase in size as they come closer towards us, and maintain a consistent, shallow foreshortening. These elements make them convey an illusion of flow quite successfully. Some more extreme scale would’ve helped, but that’s alright.

Now, before I have you move on to the box challenge, let’s address the issue with your ellipses.

Next Steps:

I’d like to see 1 page of the table of ellipses exercise, where your priority lies in their confidence, not accuracy. Again, don’t at all worry about whether they hit the frame, or their rotations match up.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
7:14 PM, Tuesday November 10th 2020

Hey, thanks for reviewing my homework.

Ellipses were the most difficult part of the lesson. In the tables of ellipses exercise I was too afraid of making mistakes, so I drew slowly and was happy with the result until you made me notice that ellipses are wobbly.

This time I tried to focus on drawing more confidently and making ellipses more round.

Link to revision: https://imgur.com/a/kVWuZQa

7:06 AM, Wednesday November 11th 2020

These are much, much better. There’s the occasional spacing issue, so I’ll recommend spending a little longer ghosting each one, and, rather than thinking of them as two separate steps, think of the ghosting step and the execution step as one and the same, the only difference being that in-between the two you slowly lower your pen to make contact with the page. That way, the marks on your page are identical to the ghosted marks, and if they still have issues, you know to be more attentive in your ghosting next time. For the purposes of this lesson, though, these are looking good, so I’ll send you off to the box challenge. Good luck!

5:05 AM, Wednesday January 13th 2021

Go right ahead!

Next Steps:

250 box challenge

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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