9:18 PM, Monday November 20th 2023
Hello Koolestani, I'll be the teaching assistant handling your lesson 4 critique.
Starting with your organic forms you're doing a pretty good job of sticking to the characteristics of simple sausages that are introduced here, and your lines look smooth and confident, nice work.
It is good to see that you've been varying the degree of your contour curves on most of your forms. On your first page the contour curves are telling us that both ends of these forms are facing away from the viewer, and yet you've placed an ellipse one one end of each of these forms. Remember that these ellipses are no different from the contour curves, in that they're all just contour lines running along the surface of the form. It's just that when the tip faces the viewer, we can see all the way around the surface, resulting in a full ellipse rather than just a partial curve. But where the end is pointing away from us, there would be no ellipse at all. Take a look at this breakdown of the different ways in which our contour lines can change the way in which the sausage is perceived - note how the contour curves and the ellipses are always consistent, giving the same impression of which ends are facing towards the viewer and which are facing away.
The contour curves on the form at the top left of your second page are quite asymmetrical, which changes the properties of the form (from something with a circular cross-section to something squished) and I think this may be (in part) due to skipping over this step where we draw a flow line down the middle of the forms, which helps us to align the contour curves/ellipses properly.
Moving on to your insect constructions, there is something to call out. The assignment for this lesson is as follows:
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4 pages of insect/arachnid drawings that are purely constructional with no texture or detail.
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6 pages of insect/arachnid drawings that can go into texture and detail if you wish.
The imgur album you have submitted contains 7 pages of insect constructions in total.
There are two likely possibilities. Either Imgur didn't save all of your pages correctly when you uploaded them, or you misread the homework assignment.
Either way, please reply with a link to the 3 missing pages and I'll get to writing your feedback as soon as I can.
Next Steps:
Please upload the 3 missing pages of insect constructions.