Hi welcome to drawabox, I will be critiquing your work today. I'd like to start off by saying great job on completing lesson 1!
1: Lines
Your lines look good, with the exception of some wobbliness on ghosted lines and ghosted planes
Nothing crazy but remember you are focusing on confident not accurate lines
2: Ellipses
Your table of ellipses exercise, some ellipses are not touching each other and I know that was a requirement.
In your ellipses in planes exercise, your line quality has suffered a bit, it is important to use the information that you got from the lines section and apply it to the other exercises
Your funnels look awesome! There is some overlap between the curved line and some ellipses but not earth shattering.
3: Boxes
Your rotated boxes look decent, those are hard to get right but it seems like you knew what you were doing.
Rough perspective, good thing you did not make the same mistake I did where I made the lines go all the way back, great work.
Overall, really good work. You understood what to do for all the assignments and have a really good grasp on the concept of perspective. I will give you some work to do and then you can be on your way to the 250 box challenge.
Next Steps:
One page of table of ellipses
When completed, reply to this critique.
Hi KELFIRE4,
After reviewing your Lesson 1 results, I wanted to share my observations with you.
All required pages were included in your Lesson 1 submissions, and they were completed to the best of your skills and knowledge. From my point of view, it's not mandatory to do an additional “Page of table of ellipses”. You can do it if you like or add it to your next warm-up exercise, but it shouldn't hinder you from proceeding with the 250 box challenge.
As you have already received feedback, I will add only one additional thought. I noticed that in the ghosted lines exercise, there were instances where the lines did not hit the starting and end points precisely. It's important to remember that the line should never miss the starting point, and you should take care to place the pen carefully at the beginning of each line to prevent this from happening. To ensure this, apply the Ghosting method until you start hitting the paper exactly at the starting point.
Overall, you did really good work. I wish you the endurance to pass the 250 box challenge
Best,
Neuromancer
Next Steps:
Hi KELFIRE4,
After reviewing your Lesson 1 results, I wanted to share my observations with you.
All required pages were included in your Lesson 1 submissions, and they were completed to the best of your skills and knowledge. From my point of view, it's not mandatory to do an additional “Page of table of ellipses”. You can do it if you like or add it to your next warm-up exercise, but it shouldn't hinder you from proceeding with the 250 box challenge.
As you have already received feedback, I will add only one additional thought. I noticed that in the ghosted lines exercise, there were instances where the lines did not hit the starting and end points precisely. It's important to remember that the line should never miss the starting point, and you should take care to place the pen carefully at the beginning of each line to prevent this from happening. To ensure this, apply the Ghosting method until you start hitting the paper exactly at the starting point.
Overall, you did really good work. I wish you the endurance to pass the 250 box challenge
Best,
Neuromancer
Thank you very much for the review, and thank you for the tips and reminders, i appreciate it
I haven't given feedback before, so I apologize if this isn't helpful.
I've noticed a couple things:
For your Ellipses:
in planes and funnels you often go a bit larger and out of the bounds of the borders.
In your funnels and tables they will not always touch the edges or eachother and there is extra space around them.
I don't know enough about the lines and boxes honestly to provide a good critique. the lines seem pretty confident!
I think on your rotated boxes you have a few areas where the edges between boxes don't align super well (just left of middle on the top is a good example)
If you need support to give feedback, here is a reference... https://pastebin.com/dYnFt9PQ
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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