3:25 AM, Tuesday April 27th 2021
So there's definitely improvement here, and I can see an overall developing grasp of how these forms all fit together like pieces of a puzzle to create larger, more solid constructions. There are some things I want you to keep an eye on however:
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Don't be too excessive on those contour lines. You need to think about where the contour lines are going to have the most impact, and actually consider whether adding another will help. The rat drawing, for instance, has a ton of contour lines on its length, but they're not really helping. Instead, one defining the relationship between it and the rat's torso would have been far more valuable - and frankly would have been all you needed.
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Draw through your ellipses. Not a big point to make, but a basic rule in this course that should be adhered to whenever freehanding any ellipses
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Draw each and every form in its entirety, without exception. You've done this a fair bit, but there are cases where you draw a shape that just ends suddenly where it's overlapped by something else. We have to draw each and every form in its entirety, defining that entire silhouette so we can understand how they all exist in 3D space individually, and then how they relate to one another. That's a pretty big issue in these drawings as a whole - they have a tendency to feel much more like you're just drawing individual lines, rather than adding whole forms, one at a time, to build up to the resulting structure.
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You don't appear to be adding a contour line at the joint between your sausage forms, as shown in the middle of the sausage method diagram. This comes back to the idea of defining the relationships between our forms, as they exist in 3D space.
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For the head construction, you're moving in the right direction, but try to stick to the pentagon-shaped eye sockets, with the point facing downwards, as shown in the demo. For some reason, that shape just works better, creating a nice wedge for the muzzle to fit into, and a flat table for the brow ridge to rest upon.
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Keep working on drawing your eyes. Instead of drawing the eyelids as just lines, try to add them as their own complete additional masses, wrapping them around the ball form of the eyeball.
I've outlined a number of things for you to work on. You are headed in the right direction, and if you're able to resolve these issues, you should be well on your way.
I'm going to assign some revisions below, but I want to impose one additional restriction on them: you may not add any contour lines that sit along the surface of a single form. You can still use contour lines to define the joint/relationship between different forms, but the kind that you used on the rat's tail should be left out of your revisions.
Next Steps:
Please submit 2 additional pages of animal constructions.
