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6:07 PM, Monday January 4th 2021

I will start by saying that I am super impressed with your work, all of these do look very well executed to me and the things I'm about to mention are minor things that I am sure that you will be able to sort out really quickly. Well done completing lesson one! Now, onto the actual critique

Lines

Your superimposed lines do have some fraying, but as stated in the lesson, this is not an issue for now! A few of your curves have fraying at both ends but it does not look like a consistent issue to me, maybe just try to be aware of it in the future. Though, most of the time you likely won't be going over the same line that many times so it's not really an issue.

Your ghosted lines are really smooth but some of them arc slightly, mainly towards the end, like they are trailing off a bit. I'm going to be honest in saying that I do not know what causes this and therefore can't give that much solid advice other than be mindful of it, and keep your eyes on your target point.

Your Ghosted planes (and the planes part of the elipses in planes) do show a slight arc in your lines as well, but, it seems that you are improving much along the way, the last two planes are better than your first two, so again, not really a major issue, just something to be wary of.

Elipses

Your tables of elipses are honestly goals. I bow to you and applaud you!

Your elipses in planes are generally good, there are a few that are floating, not touching all sides of the plane, and a few that are a little bit uneven but it is nothing I'd spend too much time on trying to perfect. They are absolutely fine and good!

The funnels do look great to me, both minor and major axis seems to be correct in every single one, great job!

Boxes

Plotted perspective looks amazing to me, you clearly got a good grasp of perspective!

Rough Perspective is looking a little shaky, the perspective is absolutely okay, you're doing better than I did with actually making the perspective work, however, your lines here do arc quite a lot and I suspect that is what is throwing you off. While I won't say "redo this" or assign you a revision (because you have shown earlier that you do know how to, and can do, lines that arc less) please be mindful of this in the 250 box challenge!

Your rotated boxes is giving me major art envy, and your lines are back to being nice and un-arc-y again. Really well done!

Organic perspective looks really rather well done to me, the first page has some wonky boxes but you had that sorted out by page two so I will just repeat myself and say Well done once again!

Congrats on completing your homework! I would say move on to the 250 box challenge now, just keep in mind to try and not arc your lines and I think this will be smooth sailing!

Next Steps:

Go on to the 250 box challenge! Good luck, I believe in you!

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1:00 PM, Thursday January 7th 2021

Hey, thank you for your review! It's funny how I always think my work is shitty but when someone else sees it I can see that it's not so bad hahah

I'm half way done with the 250 box challenge and really trying to improve the straightness of my lines there, and also spending some more time tackling this on my warm ups.

Again, thank you for your words!

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8:03 PM, Monday January 4th 2021

Hey there! Congrats on finishing lesson 1.

Lines

Your superimposed lines look great! Very confident strokes and only fraying at the end, which is what you want to see with lesson 1. The ghosted lines are overall pretty good as well–one tiny thing is that some of your lines appear a little wobbly/curved at the beginning or end, which may be because you're using your wrist instead of your shoulder pivot. If that's the case, remember to use your shoulder. If it's just a fluke, don't worry about it.

Ellipses

Your ellipses look really great! Strong, confident strokes. The only note I have is that the minor axis does not cut symmetrically for a couple of them, but it's not a big deal at all.

Boxes

Your box lines on rough perspective are a little wobbly--warming up with ghosting/superimposed lines will help make those lines more confident. Remember, confidence over accuracy right now. Organic perspective boxes are great and so are your rotated boxes.

Overall, very good work! I'm happy to mark this as complete.

Next Steps:

Move on to the 250 box challenge.

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2:26 PM, Wednesday January 6th 2021

Hey, thanks for you review!

I'm struggling with those wobbling lines, but I'm trying to solve this with more warm up and experimenting with different angles, grips and velocities when making the marks.

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