Thanks for the critique, this one has really given me a lot trouble. I tried my best, but I still think my plants look a little weird.
Hello MurcDirty, thank you for getting back to me with your revisions.
Taking a look at your branches and leaves they're looking better than your initial attempts, although your leaves still look slightly unnatural at times, remember to be aware of their size and do your best to keep it consistent.
Your tulip is also looking better, but you may be finding it odd because there are gaps in between your branch's outer edges and the inner ellipses, which is not something that should happen as it undermines previous phases of construction. Instead, follow the instructions to the exercise and make sure that each new line for your edge segment starts at the ellipse point before being extended.
For your Venus fly trap there are a couple of changes that could have been made which would have allowed you to create a tighter and more specific construction. Currently you approached the "body" or the "stem" of the venus fly trap as a sort of leaf shape, while this is a valid way to approach this structure it leans too heavily on the side of oversimplification for this part of the plant structure and makes the structure feel fragile and flimsy.
This part of the Venus Fly Trap is actually called the petiole, it's cylindrical in nature, but it's hidden underneath the more leafy part of the stem, it's helpful to understand this because you can then simplify the forms by capturing this part of the structure as a cylinder ( and then make it clearer how the "trap" of the venus flytrap connects to the rest of the structure ) and afterwards build the rest of the structure with the leaf construction method, which will allow for a structure that feels less flimsy and much more solid.
I don't believe you'll benefit from further revisions, as such I'm going to be marking this submission as complete, however make sure to not skip construction steps, and to carefully deconstruct your reference before tackling your construction, think about each form that makes up your structure and how it should sit in space, and what the best way to communicate this information on your page would be.
Good luck in Lesson 4.
Next Steps:
Don't forget to add these exercises to your list of warm ups.
Move on to Lesson 4.
Okay thank you for the help. I'll try and get some more practice through the warm up exercises.
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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