Hello VladislavJeliseje, thank you for responding with your revisions.

Before looking at your work let me see if I can address your feedback/concerns from your initial critique.

1- Lesson 5 has some different approaches to drawing legs, between the various demos. Given how the course has developed, and how Uncomfortable is finding new, more effective ways for students to tackle certain problems. As Uncomfortable has been pushing the sausage method more recently, it hasn't been fully integrated into the lesson material yet (it will be when the overhaul reaches Lesson 5). Until then, those submitting for official critiques basically get a preview of what is to come.

It is worth noting that the lesson text can be updated more easily and more frequently than the videos. The video you cited is 6 years old. While there is still a great deal of useful information in the video, in future if there is any contradiction in the information present let the most recent information (from your critiques, or the newest informal demos) supersede an older video.

The following is taken directly from your lesson 4 critique:

Continuing on, I noticed that you seem to have employed a lot of different strategies for capturing the legs of your insects. It's not uncommon for students to be aware of the sausage method as introduced here, but to decide that the legs they're looking at don't actually seem to look like a chain of sausages, so they use some other strategy. The key to keep in mind here is that the sausage method is not about capturing the legs precisely as they are - it is about laying in a base structure or armature that captures both the solidity and the gestural flow of a limb in equal measure, where the majority of other techniques lean too far to one side, either looking solid and stiff or gestural but flat. Once in place, we can then build on top of this base structure with more additional forms as shown here, here, in this ant leg, and even here in the context of a dog's leg (because this technique is still to be used throughout the next lesson as well). Just make sure you start out with the sausages, precisely as the steps are laid out in that diagram - meaning adhering to the characteristics of simple sausages, defining the joint between them with contour lines, and so on.

You'll find a good example of how to apply the sausage method to constructing animal legs with this donkey demo from the informal demos page.

Ultimately we are pushing you to use the sausage method for your own benefit as it has been proven to be a highly effective learning tool.

2- Glad that was helpful for you.

3- I see. Your point is noted, and I'll be sure to include more examples of how to apply this method when giving feedback on head construction in the future. Sometimes it seems like it's not a good fit for certain heads, but as shown in in this banana-headed rhino demo it can be adapted for a wide array of animals. You can also see it applied to this cat, this camel, and this bunny.

Okay, let's take a look at your revisions.

Starting with your organic intersections You've done a good job of keeping the order of your forms clear this time, well done. However you're not drawing whole forms, which was something that I asked you to do. Only the bottom sausage is drawn as a complete form here. I've marked on one of your forms here to show you what I'm asking you to do.

You're generally pushing your shadows enough to have them cast onto the form below, but they're not being cast in a consistent direction. I've made some corrections for you here

Moving on to your animal constructions

What you've done well:

You've stopped adding extra contour lines on your additional masses, and I can see that you're being more mindful about designing the shape of your masses to wrap around your existing structures.

You've stopped filling the eyes in with black.

You're attempting to construct your legs as 3D forms.

What can be better:

You've cut inside the silhouette of your forms on your squirrel, as highlighted here One way you may accidentally cut into your silhouette is if there is a gap between passes of an ellipse, and you use the inner one for the foundation of your construction. This leaves a stray line outside the silhouette. It's totally normal for there to be some looseness to ellipses, as we ask students to prioritise confidence over accuracy. They will get more accurate with practice. In future if there's a gap between passes on your ellipse I'd like you to treat the outermost line as the foundation for your construction.

Also with regards to the squirrel. When you join your rib cage and pelvis together into a torso sausage, remember that it should sag. If you pinch the underside upwards, it is no longer sticking to the characteristics of a simple sausage form. This complexity undermines the solidity of the form, giving us something of a weaker foundation upon which to build the rest of our construction.

You've done a great job of constructing a nice solid neck on 5 of your constructions, but on your red panda you did something quite strange. I don't think there's anything like this in any of the demos. If you're having trouble working through front 3/4 views I suggest you take a look at the puma demo which is a good example of how to tackle more difficult angles.

Your legs are looking more three dimensional now, which is good, but you're not applying sausage method correctly. I've demonstrated how to do it on your red panda here.

There is no significant difference between how you've approached the heads in your original submission and how you've constructed the heads in your revisions. I've made a walk through for the squirrel here.

1 - The eye socket is bigger. I've placed it more towards the front of the cranial ball as was seen in the reference.

2 - Define the footprint for the muzzle. It can be trickier in profile views but you can see the contour line coming down from the bottom corner of the eye socket.

3 - Extrude the muzzle from the cranial ball as a boxy form not a flat shape.

4- Define the bow ridge and forehead plane.

5- I drew the lower jaw as a separate boxy form, specifically attached to the cranial ball as well. Added the eyeball, which is also larger than you think it is. Defined a footprint for the nearest ear.

6- Added another form to fill in the convex profile of the squirrel's muzzle. Added a mass to flesh out the top of the neck.

7- More additional forms for the eyelids, ears, nose and lip.

Hopefully that, together with all the other demos I shared with you earlier in this reply should give you a better idea of how to approach head construction.

Your additional masses are looking better, but there is still some room for improvement. I suggest you take another look at the diagrams in your critiques and the edits I made to your rhino before. It may also help you to study this dog construction which shows the use of additional masses, as well as using the sausage method for legs and an approach to head construction similar to the informal head demo.

Try the revisions I'd assigned previously once again, once you've had a better chance to go through your feedback more closely, as well as the diagrams and sections from the lesson content I'd pointed you to.