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12:13 PM, Saturday October 24th 2020

super imposed lines:

it looks like you rushed it a little, the lines fray a lot in the center and it looks like you've not ghosted them often enough for you to incorporate it with your muscle memory.

they look good though, you've gone over them the correct amount and left enough space for your curved lines which to me seem like they have the same problem of not ghosting enough before putting down your mark.

ghosted lines

it looks good, it wobbles a little at the start of center, this is not something you can fix now but i recommend you put it in your warm up. The problem should resolve itself over time.

ghosted planes

most lines appear confident though some are really lacking, don't be afraid to follow through your lines to the end and also try to makes the spaces between the planes smaller, so you can have more planes on a single page, overall they look good though.

table of ellipses

with some ellipses you went over them too often, try to stick to the instructions of superimposing it ~3 times.

the lines overall look confident and decent.

the second page of the table of ellipses you made boxes that house larger ellipses, try to only use flowy lines, a hard break that a box gives you will make it look sloppy once you try to fill the surrounding area with ellipses.

i suggest incorporating ellipses into your warmup.

ellipses in planes

some ellipses aren't superimposed often enough and some are superimposed too often, really try to limit your superimposing lines to what the exercise says, overall though i don't have a lot to say about these ellipses, they look clean and the problems you have now will just be resolved once you incorporate ellipses into your warmup.

funnels

again, try to superimpose as much as the exercise says, you superimpose in this exercise between 2 and 5 times, try to stick to 3.

for the rest: some ellipses in the funnels aren't aligned to the minor axis, it's not bad enough for you to do the exercise again but try to keep an eye on that with your future warm ups.

plotted perspective

lines look consistently good, try to keep in mind to shade on 1 universal plane not different planes varying on each box.

rough perspective

lines look confident and neat,

the boxes themselves aren't neat but trust me, that will improve a lot during and after the 250 box exercise, don't worry too much about that rn.

rotated boxes

try to shade between the boxes to give you a better definition and so it looks cleaner.

the lines and boxes look neat though, no further comments.

organic perspective

looks good, sometimes you mess up by having irregular foreshortening.

the lines look clean the boxes are well constructed though if you were to ever try the exercise again i recommend drawing more, smaller boxes so you can easily see where you mess up foreshortening.

Next Steps:

i request you do another page of organice perspective, try to draw more boxes so your foreshortening is more noticeable.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
10:31 AM, Tuesday October 27th 2020
edited at 10:38 AM, Oct 27th 2020

Thank you very much for your critique! I'll keep all of it in mind and apply it in my regular warmups! As for the revision, I see it clearer where I messed up my foreshortening. I tried my best to balance my foreshortening (not too dramatic), but i ended up messing it by having the lines not intersect at all..

Heres the another page you requested! https://imgur.com/a/8T4c8dI

Again, thank you very much!

edited at 10:38 AM, Oct 27th 2020
2:57 PM, Thursday October 29th 2020

That extra page looked great!

I could really see the perspective and the foreshortening was realistic.

You can definitely move on to the 250 box challenge, good luck with it!

Next Steps:

you can move onto the 250 box challenge.

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