Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
10:23 AM, Thursday March 23rd 2023
Hey There,
Thank you for your critique!
All work done with a copic multiliner SP 0.5 + pencil for line extensions.
All the best,
Will
Hello and welcome to drawabox. I’ll be taking a look at your Lesson 1 submission today.
Starting with your superimposed lines, these are smooth, properly lined up on the left, and of a consistent trajectory. Your ghosted lines/planes look quite confident, also, save for 2 issues. First, and this is a little hard to tell because of the ellipses, are you plotting start/end points for the non-diagonal center lines of the planes? If you’re not, please do. Second, come across as a little insecure near their ends. Likely, you’re slowing down in an effort to not stop short, or overshoot, but as that’s causing your lines to become wobbly, or change their trajectory, it’s akin to prioritizing confidence over accuracy; something that we go out of our way to say you shouldn’t do.
Onto the ellipse section, the table of ellipses exercise is… overly complicated. We don’t recommend that the students play with the frames much, if at all, as they risk (unintentionally) missing out on things that we’re meant to be teaching them, whether they realize it or not. For instance, you haven’t been able to experiment with the angles of your ellipses much, and most of the time it’s the same 3 degrees over and over, anyway. Beyond that, however, you haven’t been able to space ellipses with respect to each other, only ever the frames – this might cause you trouble once you reach the funnels exercise, and that skilled is put to the question. Things of that nature, you understand? The ellipses in planes exercise looks good. There’s a few instances where it feels like you’re more concerned with the ellipse filling the plane, than it being fully smooth, and rounded, but that’s not common enough to be an issue. Finally, the funnels look alright. There are some spacing issues, but not so many of them after all. Still, your ellipses here are too small (small marks are hard from the shoulder; we, when we can, encourage students to draw big), and you’ve not rotated around them a full 2 times – you seem to have settled for 1 and change.
As for the box section, the plotted perspective exercise looks clean. The rough perspective exercise is nicely done, too. Your convergences here are solid, and your linework confident. By the way, applying lineweight to the silhouette is something that we do for 3 points perspective boxes, in an effort to hold them together. Here, where one plane of the box is so clearly closer to us than another, it looks a little odd. If you had to apply lineweight here at all, it would have to be limited to the front plane of the box – the face that’s closest to us. But it’s not necessary. The rotated boxes exercise looks great! It’s big, its boxes are snug, and they rotate quite comfortably. I appreciate the patient addition of lineweight/hatching, also – they add a lot to the exercise. For the organic perspective exercise, it seems like you’ve forgotten the instruction to split your page into framed compositions. Or perhaps ignored it? If you were following our instructions, and checking your page at the end of it, you’d have noticed, when looking at the example homework, that it wasn’t quite right, no? No matter, but again, in so doing, you’ve given yourself 2 chances to get this exercise right, whereas other students get 6. As such, even by the second, the increase in size of your boxes is not such that you’re able to communicate any degree of flow, and their foreshortening too inconsistent to do much of the same. So again, I feel compelled to tell you to please do the exercises as specified.
Next Steps:
There’s nothing here worth keeping you over, but you’ll definitely benefit from absorbing every word of this critique, if nothing else. Onto the box challenge, and good luck.
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