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10:36 PM, Wednesday January 11th 2023

Hi ZNorb, I will be giving you some critique. Here is what I have to say

Organic Forms With Contour Curves: These look pretty good. You were supposed to do both pages of contour curves, and on the submission you have one page of contour curves and one with ellipses, so theres that. Remember to keep both ends of the sausage the same size, as if it were two identical balls connected by a tube.

Insect drawings: The main problem here is that line scratchiness. It looks like you tried to add line weight in your drawings and did not do so by drawing single, continuous lines but did it with many smaller lines. This adds a lot of messiness to your otherwise clean underdrawings.

Remember, the only reason you are adding line weight to a shape in this course is if it is overlapping a form that it is on top of. When you add line weight, do so using only one single superimposed line that follows the exact path of the previous line. This is very difficult to do, but even if you mess up, don’t try again and draw another line over it. Adding any more lines other then the two will make it even more messy. The idea is that you will eventually get better at it with practice and time and you will only need one extra line to differentiate your forms.

The detail on your insects is pretty decent, but remember that construction always comes first. Sometimes your shadow areas look pretty sketchy and “scribbled in”, so remember to eliminate any white spots in your shadow areas to eliminate that.

When you are making the shadow shapes, remember to follow these steps:

Outline the shadow area with one single cleanly drawn line

Fill it in

It looks like you are making some scratchy, scribbly shadow shapes. While this does make the drawings look cool, and gives them a sketchy look, in draw a box that is not the point of these exercises. So only use the “Fill it in” technique in draw a box exercises

You also have some lines that I think are supposed to represent the highlights on the insects. This does also look cool, but remember that every line you draw needs to be ghosted, straight, and drawn with the elbow, even lines for details such as these. Sometimes they squiggle and are scribbled in, avoid this.

The last thing is that in some drawings, the sausage forms for the legs get really wonky and distorted. Remember to think of these shapes as two balls connected by a single equal length cube. It will also be good if you include the intersections/joints between the sausages, like this:

Sorry to seem so harsh here. Your drawings are really nice and visually appealing, so feel free to use any of these techniques I shut down in your 50% drawings. For the purposes of drawabox, your drawings need to be clean and not scratchy. Since Its obvious that you want to put in the effort to improve. I will request that you draw 3 more insects without any details and one page of thin sausages. When drawing them, remember to use only one line for line weight, and only apply it where the forms overlap, and to make any cast shadows by first outlining an area and then filling it in. Also make sure your sausage forms are consistent and less wobbly.

Next Steps:

-1 page of organic curves with contour lines, except draw the sausages to be thinner and longer (like insect legs. This is to help you get the legs right.)

-3 more insect drawings without detail with only one layer of line weight where forms overlap, filled-in cast shadows, and consistent legs

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
4:08 PM, Sunday January 15th 2023
edited at 4:10 PM, Jan 15th 2023

Hi, thank you so much for the critique!! I did the exercises you asked and I added the reference images I used on each one

edited at 4:10 PM, Jan 15th 2023
1:27 AM, Monday January 16th 2023

First of all, your sausages look good. I see a lot of improvement in just these couple drawings. The leg shapes in all the insects are much better and solid looking.

The only problem that is left is with the line weight. The line weight is vastly improved from the scratchyness and I can see they are done with one single line this time, which is good! The problem is that they lack confidence and they are still wobbily and shaky.

When drawing the line weight, you want to do all the things you should do with every line you draw in drawabox, which is drawing from the shoulder, ghosting it, and drawing it quickly.

This will result in a line that strays from the original path. That is okay.

It is more important for every line you draw to be confident and smooth then to accurate.

Since we've gone this far, I feel as if we might as well go the full mile. I will request one more insect drawing, but any line weight should be drawn with one single, continuous line with no shake whatsoever.

If you practice drawing confident lines this way, you will eventually be able to make them accurate. But for now, they will likely stray from the path. If it strays, don't draw another one to correct it.

Next Steps:

1 insect drawing, no detail or shading, with line weight that is confident and not shaky. It is perfectly fine if the line weight strays from the line underneath, it as long as it smooth and confident.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:22 PM, Tuesday January 17th 2023
edited at 8:23 PM, Jan 17th 2023

I did the page attempting what you said

edited at 8:23 PM, Jan 17th 2023
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