Hello, thank you for reviewing my submission!
While the lesson was very difficult for me, I do feel like I learned quite a bit and improved overall.
Excited to hear any feedback you may have, since there is quite a bit to learn.
Hello I’ll be taking a look at your lesson 3 homework submission.
-Starting with the arrows section I think you are making a good job capturing the fluidity of these and how they move through space, you have also kept in mind the foreshortening, the only observation that I want to make is that you should keep in mind that the negative space between zigzagging sections of the ribbon should decrease as it moves farther away. As shown here.
-Moving on to the leaves you are doing a good job and I’m pleased to see that you have experimented with more complex leaves structures, you are also doing a good job adding the little bumps and cuts seamlessly into the preceding structure so everything maintains its solidity.
-I think you are aware of the degree shifts in the branches, but there are some cases where it seems that all of them have a consistent degree and orientation so take more time to consider the degree shifts.
-Try to use that last 'tail' of the previous segment as a runway, overlapping it directly before shooting off towards the next target. As demonstrated here, this along with the previous point's extension to that midpoint helps to achieve a smoother, more seamless transition from segment to segment.
Now let’s move on to the plant constructions themselves
-You do a good job when following the demos, and you clearly followed each instruction, so I don’t have much to offer here.
-Looking at your stems make sure you are cognizant of the degree shifts, I know it is hard to draw the ellipses, so if you need to try to use more space, also make sure you also take more time to draw and ghost some lines. Overall your work is pretty solid in this regard, but there is always room for improvement.
-As a minor observation try to add an arrowhead to each of your flow lines for your leaves/petals to reinforce the fluidity and the way they move through space. When drawing them it is really important that you take your time to ghost tham and make sure they are as smooth as possible, this line is by far the most important as it is the preceding structure for all detail that you add next.
-In the berries you drew here , take some time to consider what purpose each contour line serves, contour lines is not a resource that you don’t want to rely too heavily on in future lessons, the best way to imply the relationships between a group of objects is through their silhouettes.
-Taking a look at your witch hazel here, I think tha drawing in a smaller space affected the quality of your linework, so make wise use of your space and time.
-Now regarding the additional details, I think your use of cast shadow is pretty good, and it really helps to reinforce the sense of 3D
Overall you have largely done very well here. You've built up each structure steadily, step by step, carrying forward the solidity from those simpler stages of construction as you added more complexity. I'm not really seeing you skipping any constructional steps, and so everything maintains tight, specific relationships with the preceding and supporting structure.
Next Steps:
Your work is pretty solid, so you can move on to lesson 4.
Keep practicing and good luck.
Hi Beckerito, I immensely appreciate you taking your time to critique my submission, thank you so much.
I'll keep your comments in mind, especially regarding the branches - I noted around 5th/6th page that the moment things go south, I just kinda "give up" mentally and repeat the same line instead of stopping myself and making sure the marks after this will come out as intended. I am currently incorporating the branches exercise into my warm-ups to slowly make progress both in my technique and my mental approach to them. Thank you for the technical reminders!
The contour lines were tricky for me and there indeed were times that I overused them, thank you for pointing that out. Usually happens when I was feeling insecure about my forms and tried to compensate for it by adding those - another thing to keep in mind and know when to move on. I'll practice slowing down more and think more in depth about each mark I'm making to avoid this.
And the smaller space... yeah that one hit me hard once I finished the witch hazel, I did not expect the small size to disrupt the clarity this much, learned as much.
Thank you again for your time, I am excited to continue!
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.
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