Hi,
I'll be critiquing your work today. Let's have a look at it :)
Lines
No fraying at the beginning of superimposed lines, fraying at the end doesnt matter. No significant wobble either, except on some curved lines. Don't aim for accuracy on those, aim for flow and confidence, it doesn't matter if it deviates from the main curve. Ghosted lines are wobbly and too few for the most part. Same goes for ghosted planes, while there is enough variety and quantity, the lines are wobbly and overall not confident. This can be due to you rushing the ghosting stage, or aiming for precision over confidence. In any case, always aim for confidence over accuracy, and maybe try to spend more time ghosting your lines. This can be seen throughout the rest of the submission, impacting your work on all the box exercises.
Ellipses
Some wobbliness for the table of ellipses, but the wobble disappears when moving to the ellipses in planes. Therefore, I assume you have managed to prioritize confidence over precision for your ellipses. That said, most of your ellipses in the table of ellipses go outside the frames or intersect with eachother, you should be mindful of that next time, but only after you achieve confident ellipses. Minor axes of the ellipses in funnels are a bit slanted, be careful around that next time, some wobble can be seen as well. Same advice as above applies. You can also make your outside ellipses (those furthest out the funnel) larger to account for the opening of the funnel.
Boxes
Plotted perspective is all right, you could add lineweight to the silhouette of your boxes to make them more visible compared to the construction lines. Rough perspective is where your line wobble issue really becomes apparent. This is the only significant issue with this exercise, the convergences are great. Same goes for the rotated box exercise and the organic perspective exercise as well. Better linework will contribute to better visibility and clearer work overall. Your attempt at the rotated boxes was all right, even though the spacing between the boxes could be more consistent and the difference in convergence between first rotation and second rotation more apparent. There is also a lack of lineweight for the top faces and hatching in between the boxes. For the organic perspective, some lines are diverging but this will be corrected in the box challenge after, so no worries about that. One way to improve your construction could be to vary the lineweight between front and back boxes, as well as make the size difference more evident. However all of this should come after you achieve confident linework.
Conclusion
Overall, I can see that the main concepts of the majority of the exercises are understood and applied. However, there is an issue with your ghosting work. I believe you may have not fully grasped the principles of the ghosting method, or may be rushing too much or even aiming too much for accuracy. Confidence is first and foremost, then comes accuracy. Therefore, I will ask you to redo two exercises to allow you to practice confident linework before moving on to the rest of the course, since hesitant linework would put you at a strong disadvantage for the rest of the course. When you are done with the redos, reply to this post and I'll check them, and mark your lesson as complete if appropriate.
Next Steps:
I'll need you to do, in the following order:
1 page of ghosted lines, try to add more lines and variety than what you did in the submission. Focus specifically on making confident lines. This should lead to minimal wobble at the cost of probably overshooting/undershooting your lines. This is not a problem, as over-/undershooting will be much more easily corrected when doing the rest of the course.
1 page of organic perspective (2 frames). Same as for the ghosted lines, focus on confident lines, since whether the boxes converge or diverge doesn't matter much as you'll learn to correctly construct them in the box challenge anyway. If you are able to achieve confident linework, then try varying lineweight as was said in the critique.
and a video of me ghosting one line.
I didn´t think of lineweight until the second frame of the organic perspective. Since my lines doesn´t superimpose well yet, I only did it every second box (starting with the third)
Thanks for the reply and also for the video, really helpful for the critique.
Looking at both of your exercises, your linework has improved and has become more confident, there's less wobble overall. However, I still notice two things that you work on, but you'll do that during the box challenge:
Your lines have a bit of an arch at the very beginning and then straighten themselves out. I believe this is either due to you compensating at the very beginning or the way you draw them. This is minor though.
A bit of arching as well in some lines, especially for the organic perspective. Minor as well, you'll get a lot more practice doing the rest of the course. To prevent arching, try to consciously arch in the other direction while ghosting, you will probably overadjust at first which will make you arch in the other direction but you'll eventually adjust it over time.
Finally, looking at the video of you ghosting, your posture is great and elbow movements are quite minimal (though needed when drawing on an inclined surface). I tend to ghost and mark a little bit faster, which could take care of the small issues your lines have, but that's highly personal, so you can experiment. One last piece of advice for the box challenge, since it tends to exagerate quirks in linework because you focus more on the box, is to really take the time to think each line as a separate ghosting exercise. For example, I plot all the points for my faces and then ghost them. Other than that, you're ready for the 250 box challenge, good luck :)
Next Steps:
250 box challenge
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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