Hello Blargher! Congratulations on finishing lesson 1! I'm Strauss and would be pleased to critique your work, I hope that they can help you one way or another on your artistic journey (and it’s okay to use an alternative option besides A4 paper, no worries, unless you go for the official critique route of course ^^).
Now, I’ll divided this into 3 major sections, alright? Let’s get into it:
Lines
Super-imposes Lines look nice. There’s some fraying at the end but as long as it’s not fraying at both ends, and every line is being executed with confidence, you’re good to go! I ensure you accuracy will come overtime, so don’t fret, as long as you keep up with your future warm-ups in order not to get rusty.
The Ghosted Lines, are being executed with confidence too, which is great. For Drawabox, Confidence > Accuracy, and you nailed it well.
Ghosted Planes, I can see some wobbly lines here and there, but overall okay! Also, funky funny looking planes in the left bottom (1st and 2nd page) you got there haha. It’s nice to see you want to get more creative with these “dry and boring” exercise, but next time, try your best to follow the instruction, you can get as much creative as you want when you doing them as warm-ups.
Oh and we only ask from you 2 pages of Ghosted Planes (and, Ellipses in Planes too for that matter), but there’s actually 4 pages there. Please only submit the exact number of required pages in your future submission. It’s great to know that you want to improve, but this may count in as “grinding”, and we've already discussed our issues with “grinding” exercise in Lesson 0. `
Ellipses
For Ellispses in Planes - Sometimes your ellipses either aren’t touching the corner or went over the base plane, but your ellipses are all being executed with confidence, so great job! (For ellipses, we prefer their smoothness/roundness over accuracy, just a heads-up).
Tables Of Ellipses, Overall great: The ellipses are being executed with confidence, super-imposed them 2-3 times, and fit them tightly/snugly within the table bound.
The Funnels: Confident lines. The minor axis being placed correctly, properly cut the ellipses in half.
Boxes
Plotted Perspective: Solid work, you also use hatching to emphasize the planes that are facing the viewer, which made it easier to visualize. Though, we did ask for 3 panels of this particular exercise, not 2. I will not ask you for a redo because it seems like you’ve comprehend the concept pretty well. But please keep that in mind.
For Rough Perspective: Lines are a bit wobbly, but overall great! Keep in mind that "width lines should be parallel to horizon and height lines perpendicular to the horizon”
Rotated Boxes: Great! For the back sides/planes, I can see you’ve grasp the core idea of ‘rotating” in space. But let us take a look at the front sides/planes. First, here’s the example from the official website: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/example. And check this one out too: https://imgur.com/a/s1bzYee.
Of course, mistakes are bound to be happen, and I assure you, Rotated Boxes is one of if not the most hardest exercise in Lesson 1. You did good.
Overall, well done! You can now head to the 250 Box Challenge. Using (any) Lesson 1 homework as warm-ups is recommended. Good luck.
Next Steps:
250 Box Challenge.
Thank you so much for the critique, The 4 pages was because my book was 1/2 sized, so I figured there were really 2 pages in the four pictured. I've since gotten paper that is a better size.
For the Plotted perspective, I must have missed seeing the 3 and wanted to go for a wider set to see the different angles with a wider field of view.
Once again thanks for the feedback!
Oh i see! That's alright then.
And no problem, keep up the good work :D
Where the rest of my recommendations tend to be for specific products, this one is a little more general. It's about printer paper.
As discussed in Lesson 0, printer paper (A4 or 8.5"x11") is what we recommend. It's well suited to the kind of tools we're using, and the nature of the work we're doing (in terms of size). But a lot of students still feel driven to sketchbooks, either by a desire to feel more like an artist, or to be able to compile their work as they go through the course.
Neither is a good enough reason to use something that is going to more expensive, more complex in terms of finding the right kind for the tools we're using, more stress-inducing (in terms of not wanting to "ruin" a sketchbook - we make a lot of mistakes throughout the work in this course), and more likely to keep you from developing the habits we try to instill in our students (like rotating the page to find a comfortable angle of approach).
Whether you grab the ream of printer paper linked here, a different brand, or pick one up from a store near you - do yourself a favour and don't make things even more difficult for you. And if you want to compile your work, you can always keep it in a folder, and even have it bound into a book when you're done.
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