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9:11 PM, Wednesday May 25th 2022
Hello Bli,
Lines 1 and 2
Nothing much to say here, you have very little fraying at the beginning of the line and even the one at the end is just a matter of getting more practice in the scheme of things. I also noticed that your curved lines distribute in a way such as that some go up and down which shows you have no preferential "wrong side" to correct, which I think is actually good. You mantained very solid performance throughout exercise 1 and the second shows some solid improvement too. Bravo!
Ghosted Lines
Great job on those too, nothing much to say other than the fact that I see no particular issue other than the lack of some longer lines. I would suggest that for warmups in the future you also tackle some longer ghosted lines in the bunch but other than that, again, bravo!
Ghosted Planes
Once again you show a great control over your ghosted lines in your ghosted planes but there is an issue I would like to see you address in the future: you are mostly drawing small planes and thus smaller lines. I can see that you got the line accuracy for those smaller segments down pretty decently but it would benefit you a lot to also experiment with some longer lines which were shown to be a bit lacking (normally, they are the hardest) compared to your short segments.
Other than that it looks very well done, good job!
Tables of Ellipses 1 and 2
Your ellipses came out quite well in general, they are drawn through for the appropriate amount of times and there is no particular issue I see that needs taking care of other than minor pinching on the top part of some ellipses. Again, this is mostly a nitpick rather than anything else.
Another small issue I could point out is that some of your smaller ellipses show very different first and second pass so those could use some work in getting used to the shoulder grip in the future perhaps.
Bravo, those are very clean and well executed!
Ellipses in Planes
I see great accuracy in hitting the points of the planes and that is very good, some minor overshooting here and there but again, nitpicking right here. I love that you're drawing very accurately through your ellipses and I am pleased to tell you that the issue you had with pinching the top of your ellipses improved quite a bit here. Very nice!
Plotted Perspective
Once again, very clean, well executed and it's good to see that you've taken good time and care to hatch and lineweight. This exercise is mostly used to get a feeling for how one point perspective behaves and it's useful to do once in a while to refresh the good ol noggin on the idea. Well done!
Rough Perspective 1 and 2
Overall, I love that your work is extremely clean and your lines show intent and confidence.
Your box constructions are pretty solid for this point of the course, really, even though they need some work especially in how they intersect the vertical lines with VP at infinity. For your warmups I suggest that in the future you imagine how the lines connect with verticals and horizontals rather than a box's side; don't forget that for this exercise the use of a ruler for box sides with VPs at infinity is allowed, so definitely make use of that for the next iterations.
Other than those small nitpicks I see everything that should be seen and more, well done!
Rotated Boxes
First of all, I commend your cleanliness again even though there is some faltering in the applying of line weight. That is entirely normal as this exercise is known to be a bit of a chaotic mess.
I am pleased to see that most of your boxes are actually drawn in perspective and not just rotated.
An issue I see is that your construction veers a bunch to the right and I assume that is due to wobbly initial construction. The accumulation of errors in this type of exercise can become very apparent and it's good to take your time to work on initial setup to avoid problems later down the line.
A big issue I see is that you didn't draw every box as seen in the example exercises. Other than the ones you drew there are the ones that are mostly obscured by view but still compose a good chunk of the cube and are also the hardest to draw being tilted in the diagonal direction. I will ask for a revision on this one because it would benefit you a lot to redo the exercise with the boxes on the diagonal, it trains the construction muscles quite a lot and it could help you iron out some construction issues I mentioned earlier in rough perspective.
Organic Perspective 1 and 2
I see a slight decline in line quality here, you have some wobble going in some boxes but nothing major nor anything to be too concerned with, just remember to draw from your shoulder and ghost your lines before confidently executing them.
I would like to bring to your attention the fact that for the first panel your initial boxes are very close together with very little size gradient and no orientation change. That is not necessarily an error but I want to remind you that for this exercise it benefits you a lot to experiment with different orientation and sizes. I am glad to see that this is a problem only for the first panel.
You missed a page of organic perspective so I am going to ask for a revision with one of those too.
Next Steps:
1 page of Rotated Boxes exercise
1 page of Organic Perspective
3:26 AM, Wednesday June 1st 2022
Thank you do much for your feedback!
I left off my second page of organic perspective by mistake, but here it is: https://imgur.com/a/v1ZvGDq
I will re-try the rotated boxes.
11:23 PM, Thursday June 2nd 2022
Here is my re-done rotated boxes.
8:17 PM, Monday June 6th 2022
Hello Bli,
sorry if it took me a while to reply but I am really happy to see that you have taken the critique in consideration and fixed the problems we talked about. I find the exercise to be pretty solid, I am going to go ahead and mark the lesson as complete on my end, good luck on the agrees!
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