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5:46 PM, Tuesday January 26th 2021

Hello,

here's the critique:

  • Arrows: a bit wobbly but you got the concept

  • Contours: you should also try to change the degree of ellipses

  • Texture: Gradiation from dark to light is too sudden like it instantly goes from dark to mid then at the very end goes mid to light, it should be more consistant

  • Dissections: for most of them looks like the texture scaling is too large

  • Intersections: boxes and most other forms are good, could use some more line-weight on front edges to better distinguish boxes though, spheres are mostly ovals they should be closer to perfect circles (it's hard but just doodle circles of various sizes daily for 5 mins and you will reach good enough precision in a month or so)

  • Organic intersections: they are kinda flat, try wrapping sausages & their shadows around form more or like just take scrap paper and try to copy like 2 sausages stacked from Uncomfortable example till you get how it works

Most of exercises are good/passable but you should definetly redo organic intersections.

Good luck on your art journey!

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Redo organic intersections

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12:39 AM, Tuesday February 2nd 2021

Hey there,

Thanks for the critique. I tried another round of organic intersections after doing some practice in my sketchbook. I'm still trying to grasp the weight of the forms (especially the 'drooping' ones) and I think I need to work out where my shadows go, but I hope this is at least passable. I'm definitely going to keep honing this out regardless. Thanks again!

Here's the re-do

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