1:31 PM, Monday May 17th 2021
Hello again Ran, congrats on finishing lesson 3! I'll be looking over your work.
Starting with your arrows, they look pretty confident and you generally did a good job with compressing the further end of them to create a more 3D image. This carries over to your leaves and branches as well. It seems that you were always mindful of how every form sits and flows through space, great job!
Onto your leaves, again, you did a great job with making them flow through the scene and you also experimented with more complex shapes. Except for a couple of random scribbles (mainly in the bottom left leaf), you did a great job with textures as well. I'm very thankful that after pointing out a couple of mistakes on your lesson 2 critique, you started to work on your textures. Because of this, your textures look far more convincing here. You also did a good job with respecting the initial construction when adding detail to the edges.
Branches look pretty good as well, you managed to keep up the illusion of depth by varying the degrees of your ellipses. Your lines seem to taper with each other relatively well. However, you seem to stray away from the method on the lesson page for most of your constructions. Instead of starting to draw your lines from the ellipses and letting them overlap with the previous line, you usually started your lines where the previous one ended or drew the connection between a couple of ellipses in a single stroke. Because of this, your lines rarely flow consistently. Remember that letting your lines overlap with each other helps you achieve a smoother transition between each segment.
Moving onto your plant constructions, you managed to draw as big as possible, while still maintaining the solidity. You also seem to build them in stages, while still respecting the initial construction. Here are a few observations to help you moving forward:
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First thing I want to draw your attention to is your use of line weight. The main use of line weight is to help clarify how forms overlap each other in very specific areas (like shown here). When used for this purpose, line weight really helps make the image more readable. However, when used more loosely, line weight really only helps reinforce the silhouette of the construction and this is true for some of your constructions. On this page for example, because you tried applying line weight consistently on most parts of your construction, it doesn't really add much to the actual drawing and instead, it creates a more clustered image. You can take a look at this diagram to see how to apply line weight correctly. Also you didn't really need to apply line weight to the flower pots since they aren't an important part of the construction.
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On this construction, you seem to add the extra part outside the leaves rather loosely. This is very nitpicky but try to ghost through the curves until you're comfortable with how they sit next to the lines of the leaf.
I honestly don't have much to add. Other than some occasional line weight mistakes, you did a great job with this lesson! If you have any questions, feel free to ask me here or on discord but I'm going to mark this as complete, good luck with lesson 4!
Next Steps:
move on to lesson 4