Alas, Lesson one is completed. Any comments are appreciated.
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Hello Naofumi, I'll try the best of my ability to give critique. Hopefully this will be very useful to you.
Lines
Your lines are fine, there are bits and pieces here and there in common that could do some work - as an example I see a lot of arching and wobbling lines especially the Ellipses in Planes exercise.
To fix wobbly lines is just to really take your time, superimposed it and really do it with confidence over accuracy - personally I think it's something that can be achieved in the beginning as long as you take your time and will be very crucial on the next lessons. Fixing arching lines it's as simple as doing the lines in the opposite of the arching.
Your Superimposed lines are also a bit messy, you'd usually want it to look like a big collective line made up of lines - but in your case it looks like a shirt that has ragged sewing (the best way I could describe it). Usually for me it implies that you are not taking as much time and consideration you needed for each line, but if you had already done it like that - then I think it's no problem.
The positive thing is your lines are fairly confident most of the time, and no repeating lines which should be a good foundation to have. Keep it up!
Ellipses
Your ellipses are good but it could have some more confidence and flow. The Ellipses in Tables look very neat, but some of them seems to have pretty wobbly markmanship - it's the same case with the lines for the solution, so need not worry. Try to draw it too slowly. Your Ellipses in Planes are good, with the similiar flaw that I mentioned - overall it's done well homework.
Ellipses in Funnels are good, the minor axis are symmetrical on each side. Not much I can add, other than keep up on what you are aiming!
Boxes
Boxes looked neat but it suffers the same because it all comes down to line, aside that everything looks in place as the boxes are intended look like in the homework.
Rough Perspective is done well. Plotted Perspective too with the horizontal and vertical lines done well. Rotated Boxes are the most difficult and it's normal to have them look disatisfactory, but there are some problems that could be solved to make it look better - like how your boxes doesn't converge to the VP as much as it needs.
Check this link for an example:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg
It seems that you get the intent behind it, it's supposed to dip you in to the deep water so you respect it before you swim in it. Organic Perspective is done good :)
Next Steps:
Keep it up, now do 250 Boxes to get the mileage for perspective while keeping in mind on my critique especially to improve the flow on your lines. Do some warm ups before you get into lessons or drawing in general, it will help you to remember things consciously/unconsciously to do. Good work and good luck!
Thank you for the detailed reply! I know it doesn't look like it, but I really do appreciate it!
Your welcome! :)
You're pressing a bit hard on your pen, which will flatten the tip. Loosen up some! You seem to understand the gist of the lessons, but it doesnt look like you're drawing with your elbow enough.
Next Steps:
Give rough persepctive another shot
Why do I need to give Rough Perspective another shot? Also, I believe Drawabox tells us to draw with the shoulder, not the elbow.
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The reason this book is close to my heart is because of its introduction, where Brom goes explains in detail just how he went from being an army brat to one of the most highly respected dark fantasy artists in the world today. I believe that one's work is flavoured by their life's experiences, and discovering the roots from which other artists hail can help give one perspective on their own beginnings, and perhaps their eventual destination as well.
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