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7:38 PM, Wednesday July 27th 2022

Hello!

Congrats on finishing the first lesson

Hopefully I can give you some helpful feedback

First up is your lines,

good job on following all the instruction of the exercises.

on the superimposed lines task, your shorter lines are quite good but on the longer lines there is some wobbling. This is probably because you aren't used to drawing from the shoulder, and you will improve at this over time. just remember to keep your lines confident.

I can see this again with your ghosted lines. remember when ghosting you still need to be confident with your lines and draw from your shoulder.

While there are a couple wobbly lines here and there in your planes exercise, I can see some improvement with the confidence in your lines here.

Next is your ellipses,

again good job on following the steps of exercises properly.

for your tables of ellipses, I think these are quite good actually, they even have more confidence than your lines.

There are a few cases where they go outside of bounds so thats something to keep in mind, but this is secondary to having them be confident.

Your ellipses in planes though are a bit rougher, I can see that you tried to keep them in bounds and this caused them to be a bit oddly shaped. Once you have started drawing the ellipses, if its going to be out of bounds its better to continue then to squish the ellipse. while we do try to be accurate, confidence should always take priority.

Your ellipses in funnels are also pretty good, they are split symmetrically into half and fit into the funnels really well. There are some wobbly ellipses but again I think this is due to you trying to fit them within bounds so refer back to my feedback from before.

And finally your boxes,

You've followed the steps of these exercises properly too.

Not much to say about plotted perspective, those look great.

on your rough perspective boxes you have follwed the exercise well, the only thing to mention here is some of your lines have wobble to them. again this is something that you will improve with over time, I can even see this with the final two exercises. I'm just mentioning again because of how important it is.

Good attempt on the rotated box exercise, this one is really tough to do. One thing you can improve on is the "rotation" of the boxes. as they rotate the vanishing point also changes. In this exercise I can see that you have repeated over some lines, even when you mess up a line, remember not to repeat it as this will make thing look messier, just continue on as if the line was correct.

Your Organic boxes look good, I can clearly see them going from small to big. When there are some overlaps for boxes in this exercise you should try add a little bit of line weight to those sections to make a bit clearer about which box is infornt. I can see that you have repeated some line in this exercise too, so I will just mention again that lines should not be repeated even if they are incorrect.

Overall I think you have a good understanding of what the purpose of these exercises are, which is the most important thing. everything else will improve over time so I'm going to mark this lesson as complete.

Good luck with 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

Onto the 250 box challenge

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4:52 PM, Sunday July 31st 2022
edited at 4:53 PM, Jul 31st 2022

Oh, thank you for the feedback! I'm gonna move onto the 250 box challenge.

edited at 4:53 PM, Jul 31st 2022
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