3:37 PM, Saturday April 8th 2023
Hello IBUASH, firstly congratulation on completing Lesson one.
Now lets have a look at your attempt.
Lines:
Your superimposed lines have little to no fraying at beginning so that is a good start, do not worry about the fraying at the end, it will get better with time, most of your strokes are confident.
Your ghosted lines are drawn with confidence as well and as for not hitting the end points in few lines or overshooting and undershooting, do not worry that either for now as accuracy will improve over time as well. Though, I have to point this out that no matter how wrong your initial mark is, do not go over it or draw another mark inorder to correct your first mark. Repeating lines, no matter how off a line is, you should never repeat it, they should kept the line as it if were correct and move on.
In your ghosted planes, apart from points mentioned above, your strokes are confident, you marked the points for ghosting as well which is a good thing as some students miss to do that, so another good attempt.
Ellipses:
In your Table of Ellipses, majority of your ellipses are drawn confidently, drawn through atleast twice and are mostly bound within the area, that is they are touching the adjacent borders or ellipses, which in my opinion is really good attempt. A little bit of missing the bounds here and there is reasonable but we can also see a little bit of wobbliness in some of the ellipses, this can be due to several reasons including hesitation, not properly ghosting, doubting yourself while making marks or not using shoulder as your pivot, remember, our main goal for now is to get a smooth confident ellipse and the accuracy is being the secondary goal now, so do take good care of this and as I mentioned earlier regular deliberate warmups will fix that.
Same thing for your Ellipses in the Planes exercise, besides a little bit of wobble here and there, other ellipses are drawing with confident strokes and again do not worry about the accuracy for now, we need to focus on smooth confident ellipses first.
Now as for Funnels exercise, most of the ellipses are confident, but the minor axis(the middle line) is bisecting some of the ellipses into two equal parts but some ellipses are being a little off, so also take care of this during your warmup sessions. The frequency of wobbliness is decreased relatively, but still I will ask you to focus on forming proper smooth confident ellipses, the reason for wobbling of lines indicates hesitation, improper planning, not ghosting enough or not using shoulders as pivot. Do not hesitate to revisit the lesson instructions if you tink you missed something.
Boxes:
The boxes are difficult at first, so again kudos for attending them nonetheless. Besides the points mentioned earlier:
Your Plotted Perspective is done nicely.
In your Rough Perspective, apart from the points mentioned above, you have taken good care to keep the width parallel to the horizon and the height perpendicular which is yet again a good point. And again, not to worry about accuracy that much right now.
Your rotated boxes, it turned out pretty well. You also did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps consistent in most areas, the upper left corner does looks sort of a guesswork though. While the rotations here aren't perfect still this was a good effort overall. The more you draw and develop your spatial thinking ability the easier these rotations are to handle. This is a great exercise to come back to after a few lessons or the boxes challenge to see how much your spatial thinking ability has improved.
Finally the organic perspective, besids the points mentioned earlier, it is a decent attempt, kudos. But we can see a little bit struggle in a box or two regarding confident strokes. And I will just add this regarding lineweights "Lineweight should be added with confident ghosted lines, and solely to the part of lines to overlap, not to whole lines." and that "Repeating lines, no matter how off a line is, you should never repeat it, they should kept the line as it if were correct and move on." for future reference. So make sure to keep these in mind for future exercises and warmups.
So overall, It was a good attempt. But I have to ask you to revisit some of your linework, do take notes of the points aforementioned and do not forget to revisit the lesson instructions and videos when in doubt, mainly this one for lines and this one for ellipses. With that said, good luck, looking forward to your further attempt.
Next Steps:
I would ask you to go through the section of the lesson again regarding confident and smooth lines and ellipses. And then try to attempt:
- One page filled with Ellipses in planes exercise.
Good luck and my best wishes. Make sure to focus on confident lines and smoothness of ellipses over anything else and also by keeping the accuracy as your secondary priority over confidence and smoothness.