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8:57 PM, Wednesday May 20th 2020

Congrats on finishing lesson 1!

In the future, don't say your drawings look terrible! These are exercises, and how good they look is not even slightly important. It can also make people hesitant to critique, as they don't want you to feel bad about your submission. Don't feel bad about your submission, and don't say anything bad about it!

On your superimposed lines there is some fraying on both ends. You should be making confident lines, but not unplanned ones. This means you should be taking the time to position your pen so it touches the paper right where the line begins before making your mark. This is also explained here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/8/fraying. Aside from that and few wobbles, these exercises are well done. Remember though, confidence always matters more than accuracy - if your line is smooth, it is a good line even if it doesn't perfectly overlap the other lines.

On your ghosted lines and planes you should also be placing your pen where the line will begin (at one of the points you made) before making the mark, and confidence should still be the priority. I notice in your planes especially you seem to have sacrificed line confidence for accuracy.

For your ellipses in planes, make sure to fill every plane with an ellipse, and again make sure you are prioritizing confidence over accuracy. There are quite a few wobbles in these ellipses, which I suspect is due to worrying too much about how they fit into the ellipse.

Your ellipses in tables are more confident, though there are still quite a few wobbles and the roundness of your ellipses is sometimes compromised.

In your funnels, remember to make sure the minor axis cuts every ellipse in the funnel into two symmetrical halves. This might be due to the placement of your minor axis line and the curves around it, but there are a few funnels where the minor axis isn't going through the middle of every ellipse. It might help to first draw the curves, and then use a ruler to draw the minor axis perfectly in between them. Also, you submitted two pages of funnels when the required number of pages was only one. Only ever do the required number of pages! When you get critique you might be asked to re-do some pages but before then do not do more than the required number.

Your perspective exercises are generally well done, but in your plotted perspective, rough perspective and organic perspective there are a few instances where you draw a line more than once, which I suspect is in order to correct it. Never draw a line more than once, even if it makes your box look wrong. It's no big deal if you made a mistake.

On your rough perspective specifically, a few of your width lines aren't parallel to the horizon, and a few of your height lines aren't perpendicular to it, as they should be in one-point perspective. Also make sure you are drawing your extension lines as extensions of the lines that actually make up the box, even if they do not converge accurately. The point is to check how far off your convergences were, and it is much clearer if you extend the lines you actually drew rather than draw the correct converging lines.

On your rotated boxes, your boxes should be rotating outwards from the middle. I believe you are thinking of them rotating around a tilted sphere on which the top pole is visible, but due to the middle box facing you in one point perspective, that is the pole from which all the other boxes should be rotating outwards from. Your boxes also don't rotate back into space as much as they should. Remember, as a box tips back, you won't be able to see as much of the top face and you'll end up seeing much more of the two side faces.

On your organic perspective, there are a few cases where the boxes converge in the wrong direction. Remember, the vanishing point is always away from the viewer, back into space. Your boxes should never converge towards the viewer.

Next Steps:

Well done! Before moving on I will request one more page of ellipses in planes. Really focus on your confidence, and if it helps, treat the plane as a vague area in which your ellipse will sit rather than a spot in which in must. Also make sure you put an ellipse in every plane

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
3:33 PM, Friday July 31st 2020

Thanks for the critique! :)

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