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7:43 PM, Saturday May 29th 2021

Hi hi! Let’s see here.

Your superimposed lines look mostly good, being smooth, lined up at the start, and of a mostly consistent trajectory, though I get the feeling that you might be drawing these not at your optimal speed, so spend some time experimenting with different ones to figure it out. The ghosted lines look good, and if drawn at the same speed as the previous lines, then you’re going too fast. You’re also re-drawing a line that comes out wrong, which is not advised. The planes look solid, and I’m glad to see that you’re plotting start/end points for their non-diagonal center lines; do spend an extra second ghosting each line, though. Remember, the unit of work is a line.

The ellipses in the table of ellipses exercise are a little wobbly, unfortunately, even by page 2. I’ll remind you that our foremost goal is not for them to fit snuggly into the frame, but rather for them to be smooth, and rounded. This aspect of them is looking a little better in the next exercise – the ellipses in planes – but do continue pushing them in that direction. The funnels show a good start, but they’re not quite there yet, unfortunately. Quite a lot of your ellipses are misaligned, and, on top of the previous issue resurfacing, they’re also of an incorrect degree more often than not (it should increase as they move away from the center).

The plotted perspective exercise looks good, save for its back lines. Should your points suggest that said lines are not perpendicular to the horizon, then those same points are wrong (understandable, it’s caused measurement errors accumulating); that said, you shouldn’t double down, but rather estimate the lines such that they are perpendicular to the horizon and roughly equidistant from the points.

The rough perspective exercise is quite mixed, and not in the ‘the first page is bad, the second, as you begin to understand things, good’ sort of way, but rather in a ‘I flipped a coin to decide’ sort of way. You clearly understand the logic, here, so please do your best on each mark. And if it’s a new day, warm up, and then re-read the material, before starting.

The rotated boxes exercise is fairly good. Your boxes rotate, and are fairly snug up front (not as much at the back, but this is understandable). Line quality does take a hit here, so do remind yourself that all these are are boxes, and the far planes are a little flat, and some boxes not fully drawn through, so, same as in the last exercise, take your time.

Finally, the organic perspective exercise is well done. The increase in size, and consistent, shallow foreshortening do a great job of communicating the illusion of flow, which is what we’re after.

Next Steps:

Before I send you off to the box challenge, please submit 1 more page of funnels. If it helps (I wager it will), warm up with some simpler ellipses beforehand.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:36 PM, Tuesday June 1st 2021

Thank you so much for your feedback. Do I have to wait 2 weeks and use a credit to submit the page or I can just give you the link?

6:33 PM, Tuesday June 1st 2021

Nope; whenever you're ready, as many times as you need, for no extra cost.

6:47 PM, Tuesday June 1st 2021

Thanks a lot, here is the link, those are bad as well, I followed your advice and made a couple of ellipses before starting the page, for some reason I struggle a lot with them, I gues I either do them too fast or too slow

https://imgur.com/a/qZVjVfG

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