1:00 PM, Monday September 11th 2023
Hi! I will be critiquing your lesson 1 homework.
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We strongly recommend that you that you don't self critique moving forward, it is the critic's job after all. Moreover, It clutters up the page.
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Your ghosted lines seem fine, there is some wobbling and arching (remember to always prioritize confidence over accuracy). However I can see heavy fraying in almost all of your super imposed lines, your lines can fray at the end not at the beginning. It seems that you have been trying to draw each line parallel to each other? Make sure to properly place your pen at were you previously started the line. Also, you have forgotten to upload your ghosted planes without ellipses.
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Your ellipses are generally fine some of them lack confidence so make sure to add all these exercises to your warm ups. One thing I have notices in the ghosted ellipses-planes is that some of the circles are stretching towards a corner or floating in place. Some circles aren't symmetrically bisected or are slightly deformed.
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For your rough perspectives I have noticed that some of your boxes have that are parallel instead of in perspective. Your plotted perspective is good however is underpopulated, you are meant to add multiple in one frame. There are perspective issues with your rotated boxes and organic perspective but there is no need to grind these out as they will be addressed in the box challenge.
Next Steps:
Please do these revisions before proceeding
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One page of plotted perspective (with more boxes in each frame)
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One page of super imposed lines (make sure there is minimal to no fraying at the start)