Hi! I will be critiquing your work today! I'm gonna critique per section based on the order of your submission.
Plotted perspective: The lines you drew went perfectly into the vanishing points. I do see a slight tilt on some of the lines on the back of the boxes, probably just the ruler going a bit off. A small feedback I want to give is that when shading, make sure that the lines fit snuggly inside the boxes. Don't overshoot or undershoot. I always thought the shading as a small exercise to reduce that automatic line drawing that the course is aim to eliminate. Every lines need to be put thoughts into it.
Rough Perspective: I am surprised with how close the extended lines were toward the vanishing points. However, I saw that the boxes you drew were slightly curved or tilted, giving the illusions that the boxes are not true boxes. Remember that the further away a box from a vanishing point, smaller their angle of the lines going toward it! You will get a full understanding of this during the 250 boxes exercise.
Rotated Boxes: Overall I am impressed with the drawing, most of the boxes are rotated carefully and have their insides drawn so that you understand where one lays compared to the other. I did see that the box on the middle left looked a bit distorted due to the extreme foreshortening. Making it look like the left side was stretched very far into the vanishing points. But other than that, you nailed the exercise.
Organic Perspective: Some of the boxes you drew have one of their side taller than the other one. It made the boxes have the shape of an old TV with their large back. The only reasoning I can think off is that you are trying to mimic perspective, but keep in mind that usually this kind of shift (foreshortening) only happen when objects are really really close. The further objects shouldn't get this treatment. This exercise purpose is to throw you off in the deep end, so I'm sure you get to understand the relationship further during the 250 boxes challenge. I also see that the closer boxes are larger, which is in accordance of the exercise' goal.
Superimposed Lines: The lines are confident, but there are some fraying toward the middle and the end. While I expect fraying at the end, some of the lines you drew had fraying at the start. Take your time to position your pen carefully before you start! More info: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/fraying
Ghosted Lines: The lines overall are pretty confident. I do see that in general, your lines seems to arc upward so take your time doing ghosting. I also saw that some of the lines missed the other end of the dot by a bit. Finally, there was some overshooting on the target, so try to lift your pen the second it reach the end to get yourself habituated. Here are the official tips for it: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/lifthand
Ghosted Planes: Lines are a bit more confident, but there were some lines that overshoot. Just make sure to lift the moment you reach the target to get a hang of stopping at the correct place. Don't worry, you will get better at this as you progress through the course.
Table of Ellipses: I can see that it was a bit rough at first, with the ellipses being a bit very large due to the amount of loops you went through. But I am happy to say that the ellipses do become more accurate as you go through the exercise. It is a pretty hard exercise and even now, I still have some problems that you displayed. The only advice I can give you is to take your time during ghosting the ellipses. Another note is to be mindful not to do too much ellipses. Doing so might feel like you are reducing the preparation (ghosting of the ellipses) in favor of fixing the mistakes as it happens.
Ellipses in a plane I am happy to see that you are trying to fill the planes fully with the ellipses. While some of the ellipses might looked a bit distorted, I'm sure over time it will get better :D A pattern I see commonly is that your first / second ellipses are too large then your other ellipses tried to course correct the size. In the future, you would want to aim to make the ellipses similar in sizes, that way the ellipses look more confident.
Funnels: I am impressed with the overall quality of the funnels. A lot of the funnels fit snuggly. Like other ellipses, accuracy will improve overtime as you continue through the course.
Overall, I'm happy that you have done the exercise with in a way that Uncomfortable intended it to be, so I'm happy to mark this lesson as complete. Good luck on your next exercise!
Next Steps:
Move to the next lesson! Good luck and do keep in mind the feedback that was given.
Where the rest of my recommendations tend to be for specific products, this one is a little more general. It's about printer paper.
As discussed in Lesson 0, printer paper (A4 or 8.5"x11") is what we recommend. It's well suited to the kind of tools we're using, and the nature of the work we're doing (in terms of size). But a lot of students still feel driven to sketchbooks, either by a desire to feel more like an artist, or to be able to compile their work as they go through the course.
Neither is a good enough reason to use something that is going to more expensive, more complex in terms of finding the right kind for the tools we're using, more stress-inducing (in terms of not wanting to "ruin" a sketchbook - we make a lot of mistakes throughout the work in this course), and more likely to keep you from developing the habits we try to instill in our students (like rotating the page to find a comfortable angle of approach).
Whether you grab the ream of printer paper linked here, a different brand, or pick one up from a store near you - do yourself a favour and don't make things even more difficult for you. And if you want to compile your work, you can always keep it in a folder, and even have it bound into a book when you're done.
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