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10:19 PM, Sunday November 28th 2021

Lines

In the superimposed lines exercises there is fraying on both the start and end of your lines. You should put your pen down on the starting dot then move it to the end. Fraying at this point should be on only the ends.

E.g

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/1585f266.jpg

Your lines do look confident and ghosted I don't see any wobbling.

Ellipses

In the ellipses tables you have not drawn through some of the ellipses at least twice. And remember to ghost your ellipses when drawing them in.

In the funnels some are slanted although they are in their bounds and in the top right funnel there are gaps between some elilpses. They should be touching each other.

Boxes

For plotted perspective I think you should divide the whole page into 3 in portrait. Working with things small is not beneficial to get the point across.

For the organic boxes you should plan and plot your line as you do for the rough perspective or in plotted lines exercise.

Rotated boxes

Again

plan your lines with the plotting method.

You have gone over multiple lines and the cross hatching is not using straight lines, many taper . I can see the boxes on the right hand center are in bold, I think U went over them to cover up the lines that where there. But U should use one confident line if it is not straight or misses keep it there and continue. Use one line after U have plotted the line out. And keep it one line don't go over it or try to make it bold to fix it. Over time your lines will start being straight and on target. Lineweight should be added using the ghosting method on part of the line to show overlapping.

Also your boxes don't seem to be rotating. They are more like this :

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg

Than this

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/6e259e79.jpg

Overall

Plot and plan all your lines

Draw though all ellipses at least twice

Ghost the ellipses

Next Steps:

Redo the plotted perspective exercise on a page in portrait divided into 3.

And redo the rotated boxes (not for it to come out looking amazing just following the process) the main point here is for the U to be plotting the lines, rotating the boxes and hatching in with straight lines to the best of your current ability

:)

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
1:20 AM, Monday November 29th 2021
2:33 PM, Monday November 29th 2021

If you get tired or overwhelmed you can and should take a break and come back to it later. Doing the exercises properly will only help you. Again take your time. If you rush you won't grasp the concepts the exercises teach , you will get faster with time but for now take your time.

For the plotted perspective U should be using a ruler as advised. Follow the lessons to a tee, the best you can.

Yur plotted is much better.

Revision

I will say redo the rotated boxes, you did not draw through some boxes. Single confident plotted lines and draw through all the boxes rotating them.

Next Steps:

Rotated boxes

Draw them through

Single confident plotted lines (you mostly did this but the drawing though is the main focus here)

Rotated

Again take your time, it's just one page, if U get overwhelmed wait and come back, again one line between plots of it doesn't come out how you want move on don't draw over it

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
4:51 AM, Saturday December 4th 2021

https://imgur.com/sWegMeL

hopefully the last one

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