7:01 PM, Saturday May 15th 2021
Superimposed Lines: You have a nice variety of lines, however your lines are fraying on both ends and they're wobbly. Remember to always take your time when setting down you pen and confidence over accuracy.
Ghosted Lines: Nice. I'm not too concerned with the lines missing their mark. But I am worried about the wobble and curves though. Never sacrifice a smooth line for a more accurate one. Accuracy will come with time and practice. Keep in mind that Drawabox tries to instill in you that each line should be carefully considered and that their are consequences for putting down said lines. We should not be correcting lines in this early stage of learning.
Ghosted Planes: Good. Two pages filled to the brim with a nice variety of sizes and angles. And you plotted all of your points, Nice! Again, though, I'm concerned about the wobble. Your wobble is not that bad but it's still shows sometimes. Be sure to rotate that page, ghost the lines as many times as needed, and in one smooth stroke put down your line. We would rather have straight lines over accurate lines at this point. Again, try to avoid correcting your lines as this builds confidence in your line work.
Table of Ellipses: The angles could use some work, imagine the major axis of the ellipse and compare it to the others next to it. Your positioning is great with minor errors like overlaps and ellipses shy off the border. And your line work is wobbly but by drawing through you ellipses we get that smoothness that we're looking for. Keep the angle consistent. Remember to use your entire arm when doing these exercises.
Ellipses in planes: Good. The ellipses are all drawn through but some overlap the planes. Noticeable wobble but it will improve over time and remember to use your arm, resting the side of your palm (Not too hard) on the paper.
Funnels: Very Good. The ellipses are all properly aligned, touching with minimal overlapping and the minor axis cuts them in half neatly.
Plotted Perspective: Close to perfect. You have good line weight control but apparently you need to use the ruler for hatching.
Rough Perspective: Good. The boxes are drawn through and you used a straight edge to create guidelines back towards the VP. Line quality needs work. Plot your points and focus on that smooth ghosted stroke that we've been practicing. Try to free your mind of any other concerns when you making those lines. Also keep in mind that the straighter your horizontal and vertical lines are, the sturdier your boxes construction will be.
Rotated Perspective. Very good. However, the rear face of the box should also follow the vp of the front.
Organic Perspective: Good. I've noticed your perspective is off at times. Just remember to use the "Y" method so you don't get confused and to keep your vp's consistent. We will learn more about the "Y" method of box construction and working with 3 point perspective in the 250 box challenge.
Overall Thoughts: I'm noticing your line work has curves all of a sudden, just remember to use your entire arm and take your time ghosting your lines but by in large the work has been completed and the majority of the instructions have been followed. Keep practicing that ghosted strokes by revisiting these exercises and in the 250 Box challenge. Also, Nice handwriting dude! Please take note that I am a beginner like you, take this critique with a grain of salt as it is based on my thoughts, this guideline (https://pastebin.com/dYnFt9PQ) and other critiques.
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Good luck on the 250 box challenge!!