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8:01 PM, Wednesday May 8th 2024

Hello! Good job finishing the lesson. Let's get it critiqued!

Starting with the lines

Your Superimposed Lines are done quite well. No fraying at the start point, confident strokes.

Ghosted Lines&Planes: pretty good. I see a bit of wobble on the larger scale, which can be helped by focusing on the end point of the line when drawing from the shoulder. Try to minimize wrist and elbow movement. It also helps to remind yourself that there is no trying to avoid mistakes once the pen touches the paper, and executing with confidence.

Moving on to ellipses

Tables of Ellipses came out well. You drew through the ellipses and made sure to try and fit them within the borders and against each other, they look nice and even on average. Ellipses in Planes look concerned mostly with the shape being even and confident rather than fitting in, which is good. Some of these came out deformed, probably because you were trying to touch all 4 sides of the plane. This can be helped by reminding yourself that a smooth, even shape confidently executed from the shoulder is more important than accuracy here.

Funnels: you drew through your ellipses and placed them snug against each other and the funnel sides, but some of them aren't aligned with the minor axis. You want to make sure that the minor axis cuts each ellipse into two equal, symmetrical halves, down their narrower dimension, as mentioned here in the course.

And finally, boxes

Your Plotted perspective is done correctly. Barely any slanting in the back edges, if at all, which makes me think you really took your time aligning the ruler. Well done!

Very nice Rough Perspective. You did well in keeping the faces of the boxes rectangular and extending the depth lines to the horizon line. Your linework looks confident to me here, which means you're keeping up with your ghosting. Good!

Rotated Boxes: you did well, doing the core setup correctly, drawing through the boxes, applying rotation fairly well and trying to keep your gaps tight and consistent. All required boxes are present as well, all while keeping up confident linework. A very strong attempt at a difficult exercise.

Organic Perspective: good rotations and scaling with depth, no leaning into dramatic foreshortening or any diverging edges. I notice you drawing some of the lines over twice: please don't do this, once a line is drawn, leave it be. Once you made the stroke, the time to avoid mistakes has passed. Instead, I suggest taking more time ghosting through the line, and staying confident when finally making the mark.

In conclusion: A very solid submission, I believe you've learned well and are ready to move on to 250 boxes.

Next Steps:

Add Lesson 1 exercises to your warmup pool and move on to the 250 boxes challenge.

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5:33 PM, Friday May 10th 2024

Thank you for your descriptive critique. I looked at my work while reading this and it shows that your claims are very accurate! You mentioned the same problems I had in mind while sending my homework for the public critique. Your post shows general professionalism, as you thoroughly went over my submission and said what I should focus on in the future. I sure will make effort to not repeat the same mistakes I've made before. Thanks again.

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Where the rest of my recommendations tend to be for specific products, this one is a little more general. It's about printer paper.

As discussed in Lesson 0, printer paper (A4 or 8.5"x11") is what we recommend. It's well suited to the kind of tools we're using, and the nature of the work we're doing (in terms of size). But a lot of students still feel driven to sketchbooks, either by a desire to feel more like an artist, or to be able to compile their work as they go through the course.

Neither is a good enough reason to use something that is going to more expensive, more complex in terms of finding the right kind for the tools we're using, more stress-inducing (in terms of not wanting to "ruin" a sketchbook - we make a lot of mistakes throughout the work in this course), and more likely to keep you from developing the habits we try to instill in our students (like rotating the page to find a comfortable angle of approach).

Whether you grab the ream of printer paper linked here, a different brand, or pick one up from a store near you - do yourself a favour and don't make things even more difficult for you. And if you want to compile your work, you can always keep it in a folder, and even have it bound into a book when you're done.

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