here is my page of branches , hope it is better.
thanks for the critique , I really did struggle with detail and still wrapping my head around the texture concepts .
I will try my best through the next lessons with your points in mind.
Generally speaking when a student comes back with their revisions - even when fairly little was assigned - within a handful of hours (you submitted yours 5 and a half hours after I posted my critique, not accounting for however much time passed before you saw the reply), it throws up a red flag suggesting that they may not have taken the time to read through the response carefully, to go back through the instructions, and to refamiliarize themselves with the areas with which they may have struggled.
With that in mind, looking at your branches I'm seeing a lot of the same mistakes. I'd point them out specifically, but the image you posted is extremely low resolution, making it quite difficult to do so, so I'm not going to. Your results are basically a mix of cases where you appear to be doing it somewhat more correctly, along with a number of instances where you're not extending fully halfway to the next ellipse, and where you're starting a segment near where the previous one ended, rather than back at the previous ellipse.
What this tells me is that you do appear to understand the difference between doing it correctly and the mistakes you're making, but that when you either rush or simply don't focus enough on the specific choices you make as you draw, you have a tendency to slip back to those same mistakes. I cannot stress this enough - every single mark you draw should be the result of conscious thought, planning, and preparation. Don't just jump into the marks in a rush - doing so wastes both your time and mine.
Please submit 2 pages of branches, and be sure to post them at a higher resolution (as you did with your original submission) so if I need to, I can point out specific mistakes right on them (and so I can more easily identify those mistakes - lower resolution images tend to hide the mistakes more). I will not accept your revisions until 3 days have passed from the time this feedback is posted, just to ensure you are giving yourself the time you need to process my original critique more thoroughly.
Oh, as a side note - I noticed that here you were making one additional mistake that you did not make previously. It appears that the ellipses you're drawing for your branches are all of the same degree. The ellipses should instead be shifting wider/narrower as they move away from, or towards the viewer. You will find an explanation as to why this is in the lesson 1 ellipses video.
Next Steps:
2 pages of branches. Your revisions will be accepted no sooner than 3 days after this response is posted.
https://m.imgur.com/gallery/etiUCEr
i am sorry that i wasted ur time.
i made sure i did everything to the best of my current ability keeping in mind your notes.
if the pictures is still low quality please tell me and i will retake them.
thanks for your patience.
This is much better, especially on that second page. I can see that you're especially making progress in reducing those "tails" where the paths diverge as well. I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.
Next Steps:
Feel free to move onto lesson 4.
This is a remarkable little pen. Technically speaking, any brush pen of reasonable quality will do, but I'm especially fond of this one. It's incredibly difficult to draw with (especially at first) due to how much your stroke varies based on how much pressure you apply, and how you use it - but at the same time despite this frustration, it's also incredibly fun.
Moreover, due to the challenge of its use, it teaches you a lot about the nuances of one's stroke. These are the kinds of skills that one can carry over to standard felt tip pens, as well as to digital media. Really great for doodling and just enjoying yourself.
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