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7:30 PM, Wednesday June 9th 2021

Blue ink is totally fine - the only thing I prefer to avoid are colours that are especially bright and neon, as they become harder to assess.

Starting with your arrows, you're drawing these with a solid sense of confidence and fluidity, and you're doing a great job in compressing the gaps between the zigzagging sections and leaning into the overlaps between sections of ribbon to achieve a greater impression of depth in the scene.

That fluidity carries over fairly well into your leaves, where you've captured both how they sit statically in space, and how they move through the space they occupy. When it comes to adding edge detail to your leaves however, I am noticing a certain degree of looseness and vagueness to how you're making the marks that build upon the simple leaf structure. For example, with leaves like this one, you end up with gaps in your additions, as well as little overshoots that go past the original silhouette, with little tails poking out beyond it. This sort of thing is pretty much always going to be the result of rushing - taking a little more time to execute those marks more carefully is all it takes to avoid them, and the result of not doing so is that the constructed form with all of its holes does not feel solid and tangible. Maintaining a fully closed silhouette is important to reinforce the illusion that this structure exists in 3D space.

When you opt to work subtractively - that is, drawing the larger overall silhouette and then cutting back into it, rather than attaching new pieces to it - try to think of the marks you're drawing as though they are cuts or snips being made by a pair of scissors. You're not drawing the leaf itself - you're defining the cuts themselves, removing from the larger structure to refine its silhouette. This approach/mindset will help you avoid just trying to draw a new leaf inside of the existing structure, as you've done here.

Continuing onto your branches, I don't think you read up on the instructions for this one as closely as you should have, and as a result you're not following the steps entirely right. As explained here, your first segment should go from one ellipse, past the second, and stop halfway to the third. Then your next segment should start at the second ellipse and repeat the pattern. This results in a healthy overlap between them, which is key to achieve a smoother, more seamless transition from edge to edge. There are a few places where you end up with a more significant overlap, but in most cases they appear to be very limited.

Also, you don't appear to be drawing through your ellipses - remember that as discussed back in lesson 1, you should be drawing around the ellipse's shape two full times before lifting your pen.

Continuing onto your plant constructions, as a whole you are moving in the right direction. I can see that you're paying attention to the principles of construction, working from simple to complex without jumping ahead too far in terms of complexity in most cases. There are however some things I want to recommend:

  • As mentioned before, be sure to draw through all of your ellipses

  • When adding edge detail to your leaves, it seems that in some cases, like the algaonema you end up zigzagging a single continuous edge back and forth instead of building individual bumps separately as explained here.

  • This one isn't a big deal right now, and will be explored further in the next lesson, but when you need to change the silhouette of a structure with actual volume (like your mushrooms on this page), unfortunately just altering the silhouette no longer works, because it'll actually flatten that structure out. This is fine for leaves and petals, because they're already flat, but as shown here, when working with more volume, you need to actually attach new complete forms that wrap around the existing structure to add bulges and such to its profile.

  • I can see that when you get into the detail phase of your drawings, you seem to be working without a concrete goal to guide you and to let you know when you're finished. This is because you appear to be more focused on decorating your drawings - which itself, isn't really a clear thing to aim for, because at no point do you really know how much decoration is enough. What we're doing in this course can be broken into two distinct sections - construction and texture - and they both focus on the same concept. With construction we're communicating to the viewer what they need to know to understand how they might manipulate this object with their hands, were it in front of them. With texture, we're communicating to the viewer what they need to know to understand what it'd feel like to run their fingers over the object's various surfaces. Both of these focus on communicating three dimensional information. Both sections have specific jobs to accomplish, and none of it has to do with making the drawing look nice.

  • When adding cast shadows to your potato plant - especially to the leaves closer to the bottom of the drawing - you appear to be trying to stick those shadows to the silhouette of the leaves that cast them, rather than allowing them to fall whatever distance onto the ground plane below. Also, it's important that if you have some forms casting shadows, all forms should cast shadows, in order to keep things consistent.

Before I mark this lesson as complete, I would like you to take another swing at the branches exercise to show that you fully understand the steps outlined for this exercise.

Next Steps:

Please submit 1 more page of branches.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
12:59 AM, Thursday June 10th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/l9NTt0R

here is my page of branches , hope it is better.

thanks for the critique , I really did struggle with detail and still wrapping my head around the texture concepts .

I will try my best through the next lessons with your points in mind.

3:46 PM, Thursday June 10th 2021

Generally speaking when a student comes back with their revisions - even when fairly little was assigned - within a handful of hours (you submitted yours 5 and a half hours after I posted my critique, not accounting for however much time passed before you saw the reply), it throws up a red flag suggesting that they may not have taken the time to read through the response carefully, to go back through the instructions, and to refamiliarize themselves with the areas with which they may have struggled.

With that in mind, looking at your branches I'm seeing a lot of the same mistakes. I'd point them out specifically, but the image you posted is extremely low resolution, making it quite difficult to do so, so I'm not going to. Your results are basically a mix of cases where you appear to be doing it somewhat more correctly, along with a number of instances where you're not extending fully halfway to the next ellipse, and where you're starting a segment near where the previous one ended, rather than back at the previous ellipse.

What this tells me is that you do appear to understand the difference between doing it correctly and the mistakes you're making, but that when you either rush or simply don't focus enough on the specific choices you make as you draw, you have a tendency to slip back to those same mistakes. I cannot stress this enough - every single mark you draw should be the result of conscious thought, planning, and preparation. Don't just jump into the marks in a rush - doing so wastes both your time and mine.

Please submit 2 pages of branches, and be sure to post them at a higher resolution (as you did with your original submission) so if I need to, I can point out specific mistakes right on them (and so I can more easily identify those mistakes - lower resolution images tend to hide the mistakes more). I will not accept your revisions until 3 days have passed from the time this feedback is posted, just to ensure you are giving yourself the time you need to process my original critique more thoroughly.

Oh, as a side note - I noticed that here you were making one additional mistake that you did not make previously. It appears that the ellipses you're drawing for your branches are all of the same degree. The ellipses should instead be shifting wider/narrower as they move away from, or towards the viewer. You will find an explanation as to why this is in the lesson 1 ellipses video.

Next Steps:

2 pages of branches. Your revisions will be accepted no sooner than 3 days after this response is posted.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
10:52 PM, Sunday June 13th 2021

https://m.imgur.com/gallery/etiUCEr

i am sorry that i wasted ur time.

i made sure i did everything to the best of my current ability keeping in mind your notes.

if the pictures is still low quality please tell me and i will retake them.

thanks for your patience.

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