Congrats my friend on completing all the work for lesson 1!
Here's what I think about the submissions ...
Lines
Lines are confident and smooth, which is the main topic of lesson 1, so good job on that! Some of the superimposed lines fray a bit (especially the longer ones) but that is completely fine as this comes with practice. The ghosted lines are also smooth, confident, and straight, as well as your ghosted planes which look pretty clean too! Well done.
Ellipses
As with your lines, the Ellipses are all drawn with a confident line. Adding to that, they are all drawn through and already quite accurate. Getting the ellipses tighter will come with time.
In the Table of Ellipses Exercise there are some Ellipses that look a bit wobbly and bumpy (Not too much, it's still good, but wanted to mention this). Reasons could be:
1) placing more importance on accuracy rather than smoothness (basically an overthinking like "BOI I really want to make this fit in!). This is sometimes subconscious and causes you to kinda stiff up in your arm, which causes unsmooth ellipses. Relax a bit and just focus on a smooth ellipse, rather then fitting it perfectly in the frame/touching the neighbour ellipse.
2) The wrong drawing speed (usually too slow, in some occasions too fast.) Try vary your speed and see if it fixes it.Ellipses in the funnel exercise are well aligned (minor axis fitting the horizontal line). Well done.
Boxes
Plotted perspective exercise is very well done. Boxes are emphasized with line weight, the hatching is very clean, and the lines are all converging well at the vanishing points.
Rough perspective also looks good. Linework is clean and confident, the extended lines are plotted well back to the horizon. Vanishing point is missed often (2nd frame on 2nd Page clearly the best) but that is completely fine. This will come more natural over time.
Rotated Boxes: Lines are confidentially drawn, smooth, and straight. However the first Boxes aren't rotated properly. They seem squished because you drew them a bit too wide. Also the outer boxes aren't drawn through, and in each corner there's a box missing entirely! (I tried to show everything here)
organic perspective: Boxes are getting smaller with increasing distance. They don't converge correctly in some cases but this is something that will be tackled with the 250 Box Challenge. Also try to add a bit of lineweight to closer boxes in the future.
All in all the submission is pretty decent. Well Done!
Next Steps:
Next big step is the 250 Box challenge.
Try doing the Ellipses in planes exercise often in your warmup as this helps increasing (ghosted) line accuracy as well as your ellipse accuracy and tightness.
Hello, thank you so much for the detailed critique! I have found it very helpful in terms of what I need to improve on next :)
You're welcome!
And if the critique helped you understand mistakes and therefore understanding of what needs to be practiced, it fullfilled it's purpose :) (So I guess I can be happy for today :D)
Understanding the fundamentals is extremely important, which is why I take so much time for it and write quite detailed descriptions. (Keep that in mind in case you critique work on your own. Giving lot's of Ideas/hints/... helps the person to understand more easily)
Happy I could help!
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