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9:23 PM, Wednesday November 4th 2020

Hey what's up, it is critique time :)

I hope i won't sound rude. I was writing this critique earlier about half an hour ago and accidentally closed it and might beat around the bush. Sorry if that happens.

So, let's start with the super imposed lines. They diverge from one side and only a few of the short ones have a wobble and the very long ones diverge more. To fight arching lines you have to fully use your shoulder and/or consciously arch against the opposite direction. For wobble you have to go in and do it all confidently.

For ghosted lines it is a bit of a mish mash with straight lines, arching lines and some wobble, although not a lot. For ghosting it's best to take your time with ghosting and force yourself to arch in the other way and/or use your shoulder fully and keep on ghosting until you are confident to make the mark.

I only see ellipses in planes so my guess here is you used the ghosted planes for the ellipses. I will give them a look separately.

The ghosted planes seem to be arching more and i'm guessing you tried to hit the mark more. At this point it is better to focus more on confidence and straight lines. Hitting the mark will come eventually.

And now it is ellipses time. Starting with tables of ellipses. You folded the paper by the looks of it but that makes it a lot tougher to touch the top and bottom but an ellipse like this example

It is good that you drew 2 to 3 time through your ellipses but they don't touch eachother that snuggly. That's probably since i can't see a clear line at the top and bottom. Nagging aside of that, i see confidence in these. The wider ones go a bit wonky but other than that the ellipses themselves went alright.

Okay so now the planes of ellipses. The vast majority looks to be touching each side nicely other than a few of them. Ghost till you are sure each side will touch the ellipse. Taking your time still applies (and will stay, refusing to go away.)

Finally, the last part of ellipses, funnels. Only 1 page was needed for this but the second one will be a bonus.

They slowly get wider as they go along the minor axis but be careful that they are cut evenly in half across the minor axis. If you aren't sure if it is cut in half you can keep ghosting and angle it a bit differently to see if what you ghost now is in line with the minor axis. If it isn't, keep ghosting until you find the sweet spot. [I wanted to check if there was also another way to check with funnels and i think by looking at the major axis to see the right angle might work too. This is for funnels

specifically](https://imgur.com/a/P0dYTbC)

Some don't look like they are fully snuggly in bound and break a bit out of it. Over time the ellipses should get tighter and be in bound.

Alright, final section! boxes!

Beginning with plotted perspective. There is not much to say here, they are looking solid.

At the rough perspective you said that halfway through, things started to click with ghosting, which is great and i can see a very big difference between the 2 pages. Some miss the mark but i ain't to talk about that. What i see is confidence and thats good. You'll get them just right eventually!

Rotated boxes! Probably the most difficult thing in this lesson. First thing i noticed is that one side is longer than the other. I wanted to see what was off about it and noticed the some base vanishing points don't entirely go correct (sorry if it is difficult to read where things are going with these bright colours) For now that they miss is okay but i wanted to talk more about that the sharper and more distorted one side looks, the close the vp is and vise versa about the other side with the longer, more shallow side. This gif is a bit fast but you can see here what i mean in a more visual manner

I do want to add that they do in fact rotate, so if it went on like a tangent, apologies.

And the last thing of lesson 1, organic perspective. Looks like they went alright. But you should draw through your forms completely. That way you can see what goes in front of what. This effect will be stronger if you add line-weight on that specific part where they overlap. It will become important when you are going to the 250 box challenge.

In short, The confidence i saw throughout lesson 1 with ghosted lines started pretty good and went better towards the end. Ellipses went a bit rougher but not too bad and boxes towards the end (mainly the rotated boxes) was some stumble and managed to get up mostly.

Next Steps:

Despite the dips here and there you managed to keep your head up. Now it is time for the 250 box challenge.

Good luck!

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4:29 AM, Thursday November 5th 2020

Thanks so much for the feedback! It's awesome to get critique.

I wanted to put the action items in my own words; do you think you could confirm these are good?

Ghosted lines

Work on confidence over overshooting. Having overshot straight lines is better than wobbly ones that don't overshoot. This confidence will come from practice and using the shoulder.

Ellipses

Keep the confidence while working on making the ellipses symmetrical over the minor axis. Take more time ghosting to get better ellipses. I have a feeling this will come with practice.

Boxes

All parallel edges go to a vanishing point. It sounds so obvious when I type this out, but I think I forgot when I was drawing them :) I will keep that in mind in the 250 box challenge!!

Again, thanks so much!! I really appreciate it.

6:04 PM, Friday November 6th 2020

Yeah, these look good.

4:43 AM, Monday November 9th 2020

Great, thanks!!

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