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3:20 PM, Tuesday May 14th 2024
Hey Kami, I'll be doing your lesson1 critique
Starting with the lines. Your superimposed lines were really good. The first page had a but curvy lines, but well, it was the first page. They got really good on the second page. Your ghosted lines and planes were great too. Almost all of the lines were straight and stopped at the ending dot.
Coming to the table of ellipses, you took your time and drew over the ellipses 2-3 times as told in the course, so good job on that. Some are wobbly but overall, very good job on that.
For the ellipses in planes exercise, it seems that you were prioritising accuracy over smoothness. Your ellipses touch the four corners but some of them are not as smooth as the table of ellipses one. Not all of them are like this, but many are. But it's still good, so we can continue on the next exercise. Your funnels are great, they are confident, and nearly all of them are aligned to their minor axes.
Plotted perspectives is great, nothing to say here. Both rough and organic perspectives are well done too.
There's just a minor issue with rotated boxes exercise. You have done an amazing job on creating and rotating the boxes, it's really well done. But there should be 25 boxes, and your work contains only 21 boxes, the 4 boxes of the edge are missing. This is a pretty common mistake, and a minor one. But it is advised to finish those boxes first and then continue with the rest of the course.
Overall, this is a pretty solid submission. The incomplete rotated boxes is the only issue.
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The remaining boxes of the rotated boxes exercise
3:27 PM, Tuesday May 14th 2024
Hey, thanks for your critique.
Yeah I found drawing those ellipses within the ghosted planes challenging because of the unnatural distortion, so I tried making them touch all of the edges, which resulted in some egg-looking ones :)
I literally just noticed that I forgot about the last 4 rotated boxes because they are so hidden. You're right, it does look incomplete. Thanks for pointing it out.
Here's the updated version: https://drive.google.com/file/d/18mUF0hIjs_iElk5bkVEzd7S1HPUMLvSY/view?usp=drive_link
4:41 PM, Tuesday May 14th 2024
I'll just add to this that despite looking very pretty, the plotted perspective exercise is not done correctly. The boxes are meant to be drawn through, i.e. in "x-ray vision", which is achieved by following the lesson's instructions. Without it, you're missing out, among other things, on the opportunity to see how tiny mistakes in aligning the ruler (expectedly) accumulate in potential slanting of the back edge, and how the back edges converge on the vanishing points overall.
The plotting lines going back to the vanishing points are meant to be present on the page for every corner, which is stated as part of the purpose of the exercise here.
I suggest doing this exercise in warm-ups soon, following the instructions as closely as possible.
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3:51 PM, Tuesday May 14th 2024
I checked the drive and the revision. Good job on that, I'll mark this as complete now.
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