11:05 AM, Thursday February 29th 2024
Hello KingCactus, thank you for replying with your revisions.
These are much better. I'm seeing your understanding of 3D space coming through now, there's a good sense of volume to your constructions, for example the first construction gives a really clear impression of the head being closer to the viewer, with the thorax receding in space. You've done a good job applying the segmentation so that is follows the surface of the underlying forms as they curve through space.
Your constructions appear to be an appropriate size. It's hard to tell how much of the page you're using with the edges cropped in the photos, but your lines are less cramped than in some of your previous pages, and you're doing a good job executing most of your lines smoothly. Your application of texture is heading in the right direction too, good work.
It looks like you're making an effort to respect the solidity of your forms, by avoiding cutting back inside the silhouette of forms you have already drawn. There are a few places where you'd extended the silhouette of existing forms by adding partial flat shapes, here is an example. Mostly this seems to be occurring in the legs.
Right now, my only significant concern is that you don't appear to be using the sausage method of leg construction, as discussed in my initial critique. I'm assuming that your intent was to use the sausage method, but perhaps you got a little mixed up on how to apply it. The method is quite specific, so let's go through the steps, one by one.
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We start by laying out where the legs will attach to the body, using ellipses. You're doing this well.
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Next we draw a chain of sausage forms. It looks like you're starting with sausage forms for the upper sections, then switching to flat shapes part way down the leg. Here I've applied this to the same leg I marked up earlier. Each section has its own complete, fully enclosed silhouette, and I'm trying to stick to the characteristics of simple sausage forms for each one. Notice how I've included a healthy overlap between the forms, allowing them to penetrate one another at the joints.
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The next step is to define the intersections at the joints by applying a contour line as shown here. As these contour lines are form intersections, they can only occur where both forms are present. On the page this is represented by the region where the forms overlap. If you're unsure why that is, refer back to this section which explains how forms intersect. We do not add additional contour lines running along the surface of the individual sausage forms (the type of contour curve introduced in the organic forms exercise) as they stiffen the construction and are unnecessary.
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To complete the leg, we use additional forms to flesh out the various kinds of lump,s bumps and complexity we see in these kinds of structures, as shown here. You will find 4 further examples of this in the various diagrams and demos I shared with you previously in the leg section of your initial critique.
Now, aside from the legs, your constructions are coming along very well, and I believe that you have the information you need here to be able to use the sausage method as you move forward, so I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete. Please make every effort to follow the steps shown here when constructing your animal legs in the next lesson, so you can get some practice applying the sausage method. If anything said to you here is unclear or confusing you are allowed to ask for clarification.
Next Steps:
Move onto lesson 5.