Lesson 3: Applying Construction to Plants
1:52 PM, Saturday November 20th 2021
my submission for lesson 3!
I hope you are well,
Starting with your arrows
They are done quite well. You executed them really confidently with your linework, but I notice that you struggle a bit with putting them in a perspective. You attempt to do it, but you don't push the foreshortening(bigger if near the viewer, smaller is away from the viewer) that much when needed.
Your lines wobble and aren't as confident as I would want them to be. Remember to ghost each line with your shoulder with your wrist locked. Take as much time as you need and be patient.
Moving to leaves
Those are done really good. Your use of flow line is quite great there. That said few of them have a problem of bending in unnatural fashion. There are few leaves in which zigzags didn't get as much love as in other leaves, but your didn't fall into common trap of autopiloting them.
Keep in mind that when we add zigzagging to the edges. We give one stroke, one trajectory, don't autopilot those. Be mindful of each stroke.
There are leftovers from your previous segments . Be sure to draw using the shoulder with a ghosting method. We want to execute our strokes confidently and make them go over the next ellipses. By following this process correctly we create a seamless illusion of a smooth line that curves.
Remember to draw through your ellipses 2-3 times when you do DAB exercises. Doing so we gain experience faster. This also allows us to create a smoother shape of our ellipse. This does happen later in the lesson, so please be mindful about this in the future, as it is extremely important to draw through your ellipses.
You stick to construction heavily here and that's a really great sign. That said, there are few things I want to point out. There are also, as written previously, problem with you not drawing through your ellipses.
You are drawing pretty small. Drawing small makes things harder for us. We draw more clumsily and it limits our ability to think through spatial problems. It also makes it awkward for our arm, especially when we don't have as much experience with a shoulder. You have plenty of blank space that should be used for your drawings.
There are places where your lines become quite sloppy. That's because you don't commit to them enough. Remember to be patient with ghosting and take as much time as needed for each line. Then when it feels right, confidently execute the line. Also keep in mind to use your shoulder with a locked wrist.
Remember to draw bigger and be more patient with your lines. This would greatly benefit your work. There weren't any major mistakes done by you, just a few minor one. So I will mark this lesson as complete.
If you have any question feel free to ask me here,
Have fun on your journey,
Continue to lesson 4
Hello Rivgar, thank you very much for providing such an helpful critique i will take it into account !