9:51 PM, Monday March 6th 2023
congrats for completing the first "constructional" lesson of Drawabox!! I'll be handling your critique today:
Organic arrows: I observe a good of following instructions, making the farther end compress, twisting the arrows' body, hatching well, but i also see many attempts where you repeat the lines (And one instance where you didn't complete the ). Plus, while most of the hatching is good, there are two arrows that have too much hatching lines... and while that isn't considered a mistake, when thinking in 3d: It's best to lay down the necessary marks so that you can BELIEVE that it's overlapping in a certain area. Besides, hatching too much can make you rush the hatching process too.
Organic forms: I like how on some instances you imagined the sausages going through 3d space! I do find one mistake: In the second page you repeat your lines, and i do see that you did it in the attempt to get the curve more accurate, which is fine, but like i said: Avoid repeating your lines often! even if it's inaccurate, confident will be king.
Texture analysis: Well made textures! i think you forgot to add the subtle chip makings when you did the transition texture of the cobblestones, just to point it out if you weren't aware of it.
Dissections: Nothing much to say here, you've done an impressive job!
Form Intersections: Well done, no issues found here!
Organic intersections: Props on making cast shadows here, and also making your sausages consistent for the most part. i do notice the same mistakes from the organic forms with the repeating lines on the contour curves. And also, some other mistakes that i point out here.
My suggestion is to start planning your lines more often. Thinking about theire trajectory, ghosting them, then executing it with confidence. Do this especially when you practice countour it'll help reduce potential misdirections
Overall some pretty great work, i'd consider you complete.
Next Steps:
Move onwards to Lesson 3 when you're ready!