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2:58 AM, Friday December 17th 2021
edited at 3:03 AM, Dec 17th 2021

Hello I am Doctormein And I'll be reviewing homework today.

Lines

Superimposed line

Most of these look pretty confident with minor wobbling. however there are some Fraying on both ends. Which mean you didn't take the time to place the pen in the correct position. so fixing on this with future warmup will be great.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/fraying

Ghosted Lines

This page is missing. If you've done this page please post it down below.

Ghosted Plane

Most of them Look confident with nearly no overshooting nor undershooting at all. but i still see some Wobbling. While this can happen because you are nervous with new exercise. If you focus too much on accuracy your brain will take control of the pen and instead make the line wobbly. Flows Comes before accuracy. A Smooth line in wrong direction is better than wobbly stroke in the right direction.

Ellipses.

Table of Ellipses.

This page is pretty well done. You are drawing with concrete goal (Degree are the consistent and Position are mostly great.)

and as far as a i see You're going through it 2-3 times which is great too. Accuracy could be improved but those comes with times.

Ellipses In plane

I saw you make quite a bit of mistake in the Ellipses in plane. Like Floating Ellipses. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/floating as i see in your homework you ellipses doesn't actually try to hit the corner but rather just floating in the middle.

With The second page the Mistake is still present but you seem to be taking notice of it and try your best to fix it. so Good job.

Otherwise the ellipses is mainly Confident and have good accuracy.

Funnels

Your ellipses are mainly Snuggly together which is great. and your going through it 2-3 times as far as i am aware. However there are still mistake present. like The Ellipses aren't Actually Aligning. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/notaligned

So try your best to fix on those

Boxes

(VP = Vanishing Point. If you don't know what this is I recommend refer back to https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/6)

Plotted perspective.

In plotted perspective exercise You doesn't seem to be using a Ruler. but rather try to draw everything with hand. The Exercise say that you should do this with a ruler. So i think you forgot to read the exercise content and went ahead and draw it.

Rough perspective.

Rough perspective. is another exercise that require a lot of helps

In this exercise you seem to Guessing quite a lot. Every Line that goes off in the distance will go toward or at Least try to strive and hit the VP. Quite a bit of of your Boxes doesn't actually meet that criteria. with some boxes have VP that isn't even on the Horizon line itself. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/guessing

You are Also Plotting The Line Back Toward the VP You shouldn't do this and instead only extend the ANGLE of the line long enough for it to hit the Horizon line. Even if the Line doesn't hit with the VP.

And Most of your boxes you didn't extend the Line at all. You should extend all the Boxes Lines toward the Horizon line. To see your mistake and how far off your estimation were.

Rotated Boxes.

I won't be asking this for a redo since uncomfy mentioned that even if you didn't do well that's fine.

I still think you'll need critique on this one.

Firstly You are not drawing through your boxes. Drawing through it helps you to understand how the form fits in 3d space. and by not drawing the backside you are missing out on a great deal on what it means to draw in 3d. it might look better or cleaner but you'll eventually miss out on the exercise main point.

You are also not keeping things together. While this might be a problem of "Not actually rotating." (Which I'll get to.) The boxes itself seem scattered around randomly. Instead of looking like a circle. of boxes.

Not Actually Rotating. Perhaps the biggest problem of this all. Many of the boxes I saw doesn't actually Rotate. Some perhaps even rotating back. I think the problem usually comes because you didn't look at the exercise example. so you don't know how it supposed to look like. As the Boxes move away from us we'll see the face that is facing us less and less. Until it eventually gone. so the front face that is facing us will eventually get smaller and smaller not staying the same. (This might be a bad explaination so i prefer you to look at Comfy Example homework Instead.) https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/notrotating https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/example

Organic perspective.

This doesn't need critique.

Next Steps:

In The Boxes Section You doesn't seem to be following instruction very much. Especially in Plotted perspective and Rough perspective. You should be Following the exercise TO THE LETTER. Otherwise you wouldn't get what the course itself offer to the fullest.

I would like 1 Page of Plotted perspective. And 2 Rough perspective. With you Reading the exercise Lesson and following EXACTLY what you've been told.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 3:03 AM, Dec 17th 2021
3:02 AM, Friday December 17th 2021
edited at 3:03 AM, Dec 17th 2021

I apologize but. I would also like 1 Filled page of Ghosted line Too. Since your submission is missing it.

edited at 3:03 AM, Dec 17th 2021
10:27 AM, Sunday December 26th 2021

Understood. I'll do my best to take the time to look at the instructions.

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