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2:37 AM, Friday March 27th 2020

Hi tenktriangles, good job finishing lesson 1. Let's get started. Please forgive the seemingly terse formatting, I have a lot of critiques to get through and my wrists are getting tired =)

Lines Your super imposed lines looking pretty confident, more on your straight lines as is normal. As you continue to practice this exercise in warm ups try to explore speeds you execute your lines to try and get them to group up tighter. With your ghosted lines you are drawing a little too slowly/consciously and need to work on trusting the ghosting method and executing confidently with the shoulder.

Ellipses As you progress from ellipses in planes > tables > funnels you are continually improving. With your ellipses in planes you are executing them in a shaky manner, but by the end of funnels they are smooth and confident. Your ellipses in planes are trying to hit the right points to get them sitting snugly in the bounds so that is good, and you continue to pack them tightly in the tables with no room for ambiguity. With your funnels exercise you do a good job keeping your minor axes aligned to the funnel axes.

Rough Perspective Your boxes themselves are pretty good. They are oriented correctly - horizontal lines parallel to the horizon and verticals perpendicular, and your converging lines are on the right track as indicated by your correctly placed check lines. Your lines themselves are a little shaky, and that is normal for students at this stage as the jump from abstract exercises to actually drawing something can be a little daunting. Just remember to ghost your lines and execute them confidently and asll else will follow.

Rotated Boxes First thing - I see the pencil lines indicating you did this in pencil first and then traced over it. Your shaky line quality is also indicative of tracing. The instructions clearly say to use a pen only and if there is one thing we expect our students to do it is to follow directions to the letter as they are given with no deviation. Please do not try and skirt around instructions in an attempt to make things easier - it's counter productive and you lose good learning opportunities. Additionally, don't use white out. I think that goes without saying. In terms of your actual exercise, you did do a good job keeping your boxes packed tightly so you could use the adjacent lines as perspective guides. Unfortunately, you are not rotating your boxes so much as skewing them and moving them over. Study this gif and pay close attention to how moving the vanishing points along the horizon line causes the box to rotate. Overall, we don't expect students to do this exercise well, just to the best of their current abilities to expose you to new types of spatial problems and solution methods so keep in mind that you don't always know all the intent of instructions until after the fact.

Organic Perspective Overall your compositions are nice and have good energy. Unfortunately you did not follow the example where uncomfortable does three frames per page. This is so you can get more mileage and practice in among other things. Once again, you are using a pencil under drawing. Let this be your only warning not to. But judging by what you do have, your sense of space is convincing, your forms overlap nicely to give them the feeling of all coexisting in a single space, and your boxes recede into the distance well. You could have put some more larger forms in the foreground to set the scale more but overall pretty good job.

Next Steps:

Your lesson 1 is now complete. Your next step is the 250 box challenge. Please do not try and do any underdrawings of any sort with these boxes. Follow all directions to the letter. We will see you next time, keep up the good work.

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4:27 AM, Friday March 27th 2020

thank you, i will take this feedback into the next exercises.

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