Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
12:59 PM, Tuesday May 12th 2020
Hi, thank you very much for taking the time to critique my work, I really appreciate it!
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Hiya! I’ll be looking through this.
First things first, I’d really appreciate it if the images were in order. It’s a little hard to judge if an exercise improved in its second page, like this. If you’re not aware, imgur lets you rearrange the order of your images.
Starting off, the lines look good, if a little loose. I’d recommend experimenting with a bunch of different speeds, and picking the one that gives you the most accurate, non-wobbly lines. For the ghosted lines/planes, I’d recommend sticking to simple dots to mark their starts/ends, and actually using some of them for the non-diagonal center lines of the planes.
I have a similar critique in regards to your ellipses. I’m going to assume that this is an issue of you confusing confidence and speed (not the same thing!), and not just rushing, but either way, the results here and not quite what we’re looking for. Outside of that, remember to go around all of your ellipses 2-3 times, ideally 2. In the table of ellipses exercise, be sure that the ellipses touch all available sides of the frame- they shouldn’t be floating inside of it. In the funnels exercise, use a ruler for the minor/major axes, and ideally some kind of tool for the arcing lines, too (a plate works.)
Moving on to the box section, the first thing I’ll mention is that automatic reinforcing (that is, correcting an incorrect line) is discouraged. If a line is wrong, it’s wrong. There’s no need to fix it, nor to comment on it. It’s okay. Outside of that, these exercises are nicely done. Nice improvement on the rough perspective exercise, and particularly nice job on the rotated boxes and organic perspective exercises- those are meant to be quite difficult, but you’ve performed well. There’s the occasional foreshortening issue on the organic perspective exercise, but the 250 box challenge will fix that right quick.
Before I let you move on to that, though...
Next Steps:
I’d like to see one more page of ellipses in planes. I’ll be using this same page to judge your lines, as well as your ellipses, so I recommend taking your time with it.
Hi thanks for the critique :D, I done the elipses in planes again in the following link - https://imgur.com/a/DkWaI0g (i added the rough perspective too because another feedback told me to do those as well)
thanks for the feedback I really appreciate it!
I’d up my ghosting time a little, and aim to draw through each ellipse 2 full times, but it looks good. Move on~
Next Steps:
250 Box Challenge
Superimposed & Ghosted lines - Looks good! You go over a little bit, but not any worse than I do and I'm on the third lesson (and not great in general, but we're working on it :D). I would just be sure to start on your first dot every time. I see sometimes where you miss BOTH dots. It's fairly difficulty to hit the second dot every time, but because you are starting from stationary, you should hit the first dot every time (or most of the time). Keep working at this!
Table of ellipses - these look pretty good too! for the page that starts with ellipses slanted to the right - this page is good. You draw through your ellipses (most of the time, make sure to do it ALL the time!!) You keep your major axis pretty consistent, nice work! My only critique would be to work on staying on the lines a bit more. Some of your ellipses are consistently floating behind or above the box. This happens, ellipses are hard. I think what I would have liked to have seen is one ellipse floating a little high, so the next ellipse you try and compensate a little lower. Even if you over-compensate and still aren't perfect, that is OKAY. I think the goal is to just be mindful of what you are doing. I'm not sure what lesson it is in but Uncomfortable talks about not grinding through lessons but following the steps and, more importantly, assessing as you go if you are hitting the goals. This is super tough since the lessons are already intimidating and hard, but you will grow much faster if you are mindful of your work as you go. For the table of ellipses that starts with ellipses straight up and down in the upper left hand corner, and the upper right corner has a little smiley face line: same feedback but things are worse in this one. I would ghost it more. I would say it is totally okay for the first lesson and exactly where you should expect to be. To improve though, work on being more consistent with ellipses. It's encouraging for me that even in uncomfortable's videos, he doesn't draw perfect ellipses (ellipses where the lines are perfectly on top of each other) most of the time. Keep practicing!!
Funnels - look good! Your most accurate ellipses! This shows me that you can definitely do this! Just be confident, know that you can do it, just slow down by ghosting until you are ready to draw that ellipse (but draw quickly)
Ghosted Planes/Ellipses in planes - I love all your little "oof" comments, I do the same thing! (except I usually say "yikes" when I give myself feedback). I know that you can draw confident lines, you proved this in the ghosted lines exercise. I feel like when you did the ghosted planes exercise though, you didn't keep your confident lines. When I moved to planes and boxes I noticed I did the same thing. Slow down. Don't set your goal to draw a perfect box/plane. Do the steps for ghosted line. Ghost until you can pretty consistently stop on the second dot then draw your line. Before you move to the next line stop and look at the line you just drew. Do you need to force yourself to go faster? (note that "fast" isn't the goal, it is just a reliable way of forcing your brain off and relying on muscle memory) Do you need to adjust the angle? Some of your ellipses are pretty far off the mark too, that's okay, you'll get it but keep practicing. It's important to go slow and adjust as needed. It gets tedious but if you really want to improve you need to focus on making minor adjustments after every ellipse.
Plotted perspective - looks good! If you are going to draw lines on the faces though, focus on accuracy. Ghost even these lines!
Rough perspective - I would re-do this one. I can tell that you followed the goal for thsi exercise for the most part. I would discourage using pencil. If you HAVE to to distinguish it from the boxes, still only draw one line and use a ruler or a bookor something else to plot your lines. As it is, I can't tell if you accurately plotted your lines back. Your lines look much more confident in this one though!
Rotated boxes - I actually think you did a pretty stellar job on this one! You kept your boxes together. You rotated well by making the angle of the lines more acute (turn towards each other quicker, I don't remember geometry ha). Seems like you understood this exercise well!
Organic Boxes - I think you got this pretty well. On one of the pages in the middle box there are like two separate lines? I'm not sure what happened there but it lost the impression of boxes traveling through space. They don't seem to get smaller as they "move" away.
Next Steps:
Re-do the rough perspective homework. I think it seems like you get the point of the exercise, but I can't really tell because your plotted lines aren't neat. I think it'd be a good opportunity for you to see how when the vanishing point is further away from the box, the angle can be pretty extreme. Overall good work! Keep ghosting and keeping that confidence. After you do a rough perspective, I would move on to boxes. If I were you, I would do a half page of ghosted planes and ellipses everyday before you do the boxes. Doing 250 boxes will be the perfect opportunity to work on line confident and accuracy though :)
Hi thanks for the critique :D, I done the rough perspective again in the following link - https://imgur.com/a/DkWaI0g (i added the planes too because another feedback told me to do those as well)
thanks for the feedback I really appreciate it!
good work! I really do think your planes and ellipses improved! the rough perspective was much clearer and I hope it helped! I would move on to boxes if I were you.
Next Steps:
boxes, yay! (they aren't so bad)
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