6:45 PM, Thursday December 1st 2022
Hey there!! I will be looking over your homework today ^-^ Congrats on making it through the second lesson and the cursed sausages!! I believe you can beat those mortal enemies!!
I'll be focusing on what I think you did well first, before explaining where I think you have room to improve, if need be. Let's hop into it!
Arrows: Your arrows flow smoothly and confidently through 3D space, good job! You also seem to have a good understanding where and how to place the shadow and where to emphasize the edges. I notice one minor thing and that is your arrows tend to widen around the middle, widen rapidly or become smaller towards the end that is coming closer to the viewer, when it should be the opposite. It's a relatively minor thing but keep an eye on that if you add this to your warm-ups!
Organic Forms: Your sausages look good! Seems like you slayed the enemy. Sometimes they tend to be a bit elongated. In this as well, keep an eye on it, but it's something you learn as you do. If you have trouble with it, maybe this info by Uncomfortable might help: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/simplesausage
Good job on the ellipses too! They're placed confidently, drawn through twice and move in space with the sausage. Nice!
Texture: I definitely understand the fear around texture, it's a huge topic! You did well with this one, too. The gradient is a hard thing to manage and you added it as well as you could. You're sticking to cast shadows and placing shapes above lines. The most important thing about this assignment is that you learn to really look at your reference and train your eye. And you definitely did that. Good job on breaking the silhouette in the Dissection and making the texture curl around the sausage. There's one minor thing. I noticed you have quiet a big stretch of nothing at all where the light source is hitting from directly above. While this would be right, for the sake of your own progress I would leave that strip of nothing far smaller and instead try to create a gradient from something to nothing, since right now it seems kind of like an abrupt ending eg. the hedhehog spikes, the coconut husk, hay and jackfruit.
Construction: Your constructions are looking really good! The forms are all confidently drawn and look like they're all sitting within the same space and interacting with each other. The intersections themselves also look like they're making sense. Hooray! In your organic intersections I also believe you might profit from using less sausages, since it might get too clustered and with a bit fewer you can properly concentrate on each form and the shadow they cast. Aside from this, they look properly floppy. Nice!
This should be it! You got a firm grasp on everything the assignments wanted you to learn and I don't think I would need any revisions from you. Just keep an eye on the thing I mentioned and maybe try a few things in your future warm-ups.
Also I saw your art! It looked really pretty and I loved the colours, if you don't mind, can I follow you on Twitter or another app? o3o
If you have any questions feel free to ask! Have fun in the next lesson :>
On towards Lesson 3!