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4:20 PM, Sunday September 6th 2020
For the initial exercise (lines), I can tell you are making broad, confident strokes, but the lines I see in some of your box exercise don't visually appear to be applying that same technique in all cases. Do you feel more hesitant when constructing boxes, perhaps because you feel a stonger need to control where the line ends up in order to get those parallel edges?
I think you did a pretty good job as well with drawing a line between two points -- I wonder if, for practice with boxes, you could plot the corners of the boxes and then just draw a straight, confident line between them (with ghosting) until you feel more confident with controlling where the ends of your lines go?
Keep it up!
9:05 PM, Sunday September 6th 2020
Yeah, you're right about my hesitation to draw lines when constructing boxes. I'll try plotting the corners and see if that improves my lines.
Thank you for the feedback!
4:27 PM, Tuesday September 22nd 2020
Half a month later, critique time! Also, if things take a while, like 1 week+, you can try and check on discord if anyone can take a look on your stuff.
That pen you used has very light lines, barely stronger than your pencil. See if you can get a fineliner in the near future. Anyway, on with the critique.
Lines: There is significant fraying on your lines and some of it happens right after the start, even on the shorter lines.
The ghosted lines could've used more variation in length. You often get very close to the end point, which is good, but in some cases you missed the starting spot, too, which is not good.
A significant portion of your ghosted planes aren't properly closed, the lines don't reach the end point. It's better to overshoot, go over the point, than to not reach it. There is visible wobble in some lines and curving/arcing in others, but the lines look good for the most part, even if they don't reach the end point.
Ellipses: The table looks ok, but many ellipses visibly had more than 3 passes. The main problem here is with the subsequent passes straying from the previous one. The good is that they're mostly well contained within the borders.
The ellipses on planes is 50/50, half with significant straying, the second and third passes very off from one another; the other half with more controlled passes. In all cases, you manage to get most, if not all, borders touched, which is good.
On the funnels, they're properly cut in half by the middle line most of the time. Their sizes is a bit inconsistent and the straying from consecutive passes is visible.
Perspective: The plotted perspective was supposed to be 3 frames, but you got that one right so I don't think you'll need to make the rest of it.
The rough perspective is good, you understood the theory and some boxes came very close to converging at the VP, even if others didn't so well. The main problem here are the lines of the boxes, with many visibly wobbly, arcing or failing to reach the end point. There were also some cases of scratching, drawing over lines, avoid that.
The front faces of the rotated boxes is very close to being right, but the back faces break the rotation, this is very visible in the 3 middle horizontal lines, the back faces almost look like parallels.
Your organic perspective looks very good, most of the boxes correctly get smaller as they follow the line. The problem, like before, is that your lines often don't end up straight.
Next Steps:
On to the 250 box challenge.
Also, practice the superimposed lines and ghosted lines/planes as warmup every day. If you go with the ghosted planes, also practice your ellipses inside them. If you don't do ghosted planes, using a normal school notebook can be useful for exercising your ellipses. For all of these, use a pencil.
12:26 PM, Sunday November 15th 2020
I'm a bit late with noticing your critique. Thank you though, very helpful!
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