Hello I’ll be handling the critique for your lesson 2 homework.

Organic Arrows

-Starting by the organic arrows they are drawn with a good deal of confidence your making some good attempts at the perspective of the ribbon. The main issue here though is that you are not aware that the negative space between the zigzagging sections of the ribbon should decrease as it moves further away, as shown here ( https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/011d064f.jpg ), this is the only thing missing for your arrows to look tridimensional.

Organic Forms with contours

-The shape of your sausages needs some work, there are a few that pinch or swell where they should not, try to stick to the recipe of two balls connected by a tube of consistent width. When it comes to the ellipses it seems that you are aware of how they change degree as they move through space, and the contour curves are moving in the right direction in many ways, although they seem to be barely changing degrees compared to the contour ellipses. Contour curves are a useful tool to describe how a form sits in 3D space but they can easily work against us by flattening our drawing, the best approach is to use the ghosting method to think about each mark’s purpose and how you are going to achieve it best, once that is done you can focus on executing that mark with confidence. This way you will avoid drawing contours that do not really add any useful information to the drawing. And also keep in mind that you don’t need to draw too many to convey the tri dimensionality of a form.

Texture

Organic Forms with contours

-The shape of your sausages needs some work, there are a few that pinch or swell where they should not, try to stick to the recipe of two balls connected by a tube of consistent width. When it comes to the ellipses it seems that you are aware of how they change degree as they move through space, and the contour curves are moving in the right direction in many ways, although they seem to be barely changing degrees compared to the contour ellipses. Contour curves are a useful tool to describe how a form sits in 3D space but they can easily work against us by flattening our drawing, the best approach is to use the ghosting method to think about each mark’s purpose and how you are going to achieve it best, once that is done you can focus on executing that mark with confidence. This way you will avoid drawing contours that do not really add any useful information to the drawing. And also keep in mind that you don’t need to draw too many to convey the tri dimensionality of a form.

Texture

-On the texture analysis you are doing a good job, I like to see a bold use of the shadows to create the transition from dense to sparse in the middle one

• dissection are great

Form Intersections

-Moving on to the form intersections you are doing great, you have kept the foreshortening shallow and your forms are not too different when it comes to size, which makes it look like they're actually sharing the same 3D space. If you feel like you don’t fully grasp them yet don't worry as we will be revisiting this exercise in future lessons

Organic Intersections

-Finishing with the organic intersections, you are moving in the right direction. I do think that you are letting your forms get too complex,

The cast shadows also need some work, right now they seem to be hugging the form casting them, so try to push them further and give them a nice curve, you can take a look at these notes to better understand this point. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/9/shadows like first page on the right