Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
8:45 AM, Thursday September 28th 2023
Redoing DAB, Lesson One for critique.
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6:00 AM, Monday October 9th 2023
Congratulations on completing lesson 1! I will try to give some feedback on your homework.
Your superimposed lines appear to be drawn confidently in one motion, which is good. Your lines have fraying at the ends, but that is okay at this stage. One thing is that your longer superimposed lines are curving more than your shorter ones. Make sure you draw these from the shoulder and not the elbow. If you still feel like you tend to curve your lines even when drawing from the shoulder (which is very common), consider consciously arcing your lines in the opposite direction. Uncomfortable talks about this more in-depth in the Ghosted Lines homework under the section "Mistake: Arcing lines."
Most of your ghosted lines are drawn confidently, and you do a good job of connecting both dots. There are a couple which are wobbly, but this will improve with time as you continue to build muscle memory. The same is true with your ghosted planes.
Both of your ellipse tables and ellipses in planes are drawn very well in my opinion. You do a good job of drawing through your ellipses and keeping them within the boundaries of the box/plane. Also, your ellipses in funnels are done well and have good alignment for the most part.
Your plotted perspective is good, although many of the back vertical lines of the boxes do not line up with the back corners of the boxes. However, this is hard to avoid as small errors build up while drawing lines back to the vanishing point.
In your rough perspective, a lot of the lines are not converging towards the vanishing point. Don't worry, as this exercise is designed to be difficult, and your ability to draw converging lines will improve with the 250 box challenge.
Your rotated boxes are very well done, especially considering this is the hardest exercise of lesson 1. Most of the boxes are rotating correctly. My only critique is that the line-work can be improved. Continue to use the ghosting method and include ghosting lines as a part of your warm-ups in the future.
Lastly, your organic perspective does a good job of using foreshortening to create 3D space. However, many of your boxes have sets of lines that are diverging instead of converging. An example is the front box in the second panel, where some of the lines are moving away from each other, creating a distorted look. Again, this will get better while doing the 250 box challenge.
Overall, great start, and best of luck with the rest of your Drawabox journey.
Next Steps:
Move on to 250 Box Challenge!
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