Hello I’ll be handling the critique for your lesson 2 homework.

-Starting with the organic arrows, these are drawn with a good deal of confidence which really helps you to capture the way they move through space but I want to draw your attention to some things. First do not be afraid of overlapping your lines, I’ve gone ahead and marked some places where your arrows do not overlap, take a look here. Also remember that the negative space between zigzagging sections of the ribbon should decrease as it moves further away as shown here. Lastly you are doing a great job when it comes to the perspective of these arrows, but there is still some room for improvement here, remember that the ribbon should get wider as it moves closer to us and not the other way around.

-Moving on to the organic forms you are drawing them confidently, but some of them have unequally sized ends, you want to make both ends roughly the same size, I say roughly because it is very tricky to get them right. You can think of them as two balls connected by a tube of consistent width. Take some time to study this diagram

• You are doing a good job when it comes to fitting the ellipses within the sausage, and I can see that you are clearly thinking about the degree shifts, but in some sausages they look consistent, so make sure you take your time to think about what each marks purpose is and how you are going to achieve it best.

• The same problem shows up at the organic forms with contour curves, here you want to imagine as if you were carving your pen along the surface of the sausage, this way you will start to get the little bits of nuance that help describe how this form sits in space.

-On the texture analysis you are doing a great job, and I can see that you are clearly thinking about the cast shadows rather than the outlines. I can still see the strip filled with ink so make sure you are integrating more seamlessly into the gradient, so you can achieve a smoother transition from dense to sparse.

-On the dissections you have kept up the good work but here you did focus a little bit on outlines, form shading and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. Take your time and keep studying the section on cast shadows.I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.

-You are doing an excellent job on the form intersections, first each one of your forms feel very tridimensional on their own, thus the whole set of forms feel solid and they seem to be sharing the same 3D space. When it comes to the actual intersections themselves,I can see that you are clearly doing your best, don’t worry if you feel like you don’t fully grasp them, as we will be revisiting them in later lessons.

-Finishing with the organic intersections, try to keep your sausages simple and easy to work with, avoid any unequally sized sausage or elongated one, and try to keep all of them roughly the same size. Try to think of them as balloons filled with water, and imagine how they bend and sag under the force of gravity. For example here it is difficult so see what is supporting that sausage, don’t leave them floating in the air like that, hopefully the drawing is clear enough. Lastly, you are doing a great job when it comes to the cast shadows, as you pushed them far enough.

Well this has got rather long, but I just want to give you some additional work, so I’ll leave your revisions below and I look forward to seeing your work, good luck!!