8:33 AM, Sunday September 12th 2021
Hi there, I'll be handling your box challenge critique.
Not only does the challenge help deepen your understanding of important concepts but it shows your desire to learn as well. Be proud of what you've accomplished and that desire you've shown. That being said I'll try to keep this critique fairly brief so you can get working on the next steps as soon as possible.
Things you did well:
It appears like you're trying to hatch your lines evenly which helps keep them tidy, your line quality however hurts your submission overall and will be something I address in the next section.
You're trying to apply line weight which is nice to see. It takes a fair bit of mileage before people find themselves comfortable applying it so getting an early start is a good idea. Much like your hatching lines you line quality betrays you here.
When it comes to construction it's great to see that you're experimenting with proportions, orientations and rates of foreshortening. Experimentation is an important habit to build as it helps us develop a more well rounded understanding of the concepts we're practicing. I hope you continue to nurture and demonstrate this habit in the future as well.
Overall your convergences are looking more consistent as you progress through the challenge with fewer distorted boxes being created from diverging lines.
Things you can work on:
The biggest thing to work on is your line quality. I did look back at your previous work and saw that this was an older submission and that you were given the go ahead to submit your old boxes. I also saw that were asked for some revisions in regards to your line confidence and did demonstrate some improvement but there was still work to be done.
There are times when your lines converge in pairs or you attempt to keep your lines a bit too parallel which results in them diverging. This is an example of lines converging in pairs, and this shows the relation between each line in a set and their respective vanishing point. The inner pair of lines will be quite similar unless the box gets quite long and the outer pair can vary a lot depending on the location of the vanishing point. Move it further away and the lines become closer to parallel while moving it closer increases the rate of foreshortening.
The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.
I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds off concepts in the previous course material so if you move forward with un-addressed issues you end up just creating further issues on top of them. Drawing confidently is a critical part of the course so I need to make sure you can do so consistently. Overall it seems like you're largely on the right track in regards to the box concepts being taught in this challenge so I'll just be asking you to draw 10 more in hopes that it'll be enough to give you the chance to demonstrate smooth and confident lines.
Once you've completed your boxes reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready I'll move you on to the next lesson.
I know you can do this and look forward to seeing your work.
10 more boxes please.
12:55 AM, Wednesday September 15th 2021
Here are my redos. Thank you for the critiques! Also, assuming these are accepted, do you think I shoud submit my old artwork from the Lesson 2 I did a while back, or should I redo it? If the answer is to just submit the old artwork, what do you think I should do in the meantime? Can I go ahead to Lesson 3?
3:01 AM, Wednesday September 15th 2021
These are an improvement over the lines in your submission but there is still work to do.
You're still wobbling which shows that you're hesitating, remember that confidence is our top priority and accuracy will come with mileage. You struggle with overshooting lines as well at times, when trying to stop your lines instead of just stopping on the page try lifting your pen while it's in motion. You may continue to overshoot your intended stopping points in the beginning but as your muscle memory builds you'll begin to know when to lift your pen in order to maintain confident lines while stopping accurately.
I will be moving you on to lesson 2 with the hope that you work on this in your own time.
As for your old work, from this point forward it must all be work that demonstrates your current skill level. Old work demonstrates issues that should have been addressed already. Your line quality in your box challenge is a good example, it's something that would have been addressed if you waited for lesson 1 critique before starting the next step (not saying you did anything wrong in this case, it's just an example).
From this point forward you'll be waiting for your critiques before starting the next section, meaning that you'll be redoing lesson 2. Once you hand that in for critique, you'll get the go ahead to move on to lesson 3 then you can start that lesson etc.
Hope that clarifies things, keep practicing previous exercises and boxes as warm ups, work on your line confidence as well as the 50% rule in lesson 0.
Good luck with lesson 2.
Move on to lesson 2.