4:02 PM, Wednesday June 3rd 2020
There is definitely improvement here, along with some things to work on.
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Your organic forms' sausages are generally doing a better job of sticking to the 'simple' sausage characteristics from the instructions, though you're still struggling to draw your contour lines with degrees that shift naturally along the form, which I addressed in the second point on this exercise in my initial critique. Observe how the degree changes gradually in this image, as well as here.
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Your grasshopper still shows a tendency to try and rough things in faintly, then go back over your linework with a darker stroke to separate it into an "underdrawing" and a "cleanup pass". This is something I talked about specifically in my initial critique. You do improve upon this in your other drawings though, so that's good to see.
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When employing the sausage method (I mean to link that diagram previously but it seems I forgot to actually paste it in), you've got a few issues: 1] You're drawing stretched ellipses, not simple sausage forms. 2] You're "drawing through" your segments - which would make sense for ellipses, but don't do this when actually drawing proper sausage forms. 3] You're not drawing a contour line at the joint between the forms as shown in the middle of the sausage method diagram. This is an important aspect of the technique, as it helps define the relationship/intersection between the sausage segments.
You're almost there, but I'm going to assign a couple more pages below.
Next Steps:
I'd like to see one more page of organic forms with contour lines (half ellipses, half curves), and just one more insect drawing.