2:16 AM, Wednesday June 3rd 2020
Thank you so much for your feedback. Additional pages attached
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4:02 PM, Wednesday June 3rd 2020
There is definitely improvement here, along with some things to work on.
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Your organic forms' sausages are generally doing a better job of sticking to the 'simple' sausage characteristics from the instructions, though you're still struggling to draw your contour lines with degrees that shift naturally along the form, which I addressed in the second point on this exercise in my initial critique. Observe how the degree changes gradually in this image, as well as here.
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Your grasshopper still shows a tendency to try and rough things in faintly, then go back over your linework with a darker stroke to separate it into an "underdrawing" and a "cleanup pass". This is something I talked about specifically in my initial critique. You do improve upon this in your other drawings though, so that's good to see.
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When employing the sausage method (I mean to link that diagram previously but it seems I forgot to actually paste it in), you've got a few issues: 1] You're drawing stretched ellipses, not simple sausage forms. 2] You're "drawing through" your segments - which would make sense for ellipses, but don't do this when actually drawing proper sausage forms. 3] You're not drawing a contour line at the joint between the forms as shown in the middle of the sausage method diagram. This is an important aspect of the technique, as it helps define the relationship/intersection between the sausage segments.
You're almost there, but I'm going to assign a couple more pages below.
Next Steps:
I'd like to see one more page of organic forms with contour lines (half ellipses, half curves), and just one more insect drawing.
5:20 PM, Friday June 5th 2020
Additional pages below. Thanks as always for your feedback.
10:13 PM, Friday June 5th 2020
Your page of organic forms with contour curves is looking good. Your ant's coming along well, though I've outlined a number of things you need to keep in mind. They all basically relate to what I mentioned in my initial critique. You need to respect the idea that everything you're drawing is three dimensional. It's very easy, and very tempting, to modify things in 2D space - like taking the silhouette of a form and extending it to include a little bump or something. Doing this reminds the viewer that they're looking at something two dimensional though - not a real, tangible, 3D object.
You always have to interact with these things in 3D space, which means building things up with individual, complete 3D forms, and thinking about how they all attach to one another.
Anyway, you're moving in the right direction here, so I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete. You can continue to work on what I mentioned above in the next lesson.
Next Steps:
Move onto lesson 5.
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