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11:19 PM, Thursday January 12th 2023

While in general the Lesson 7 submissions I receive are either really solid, or not too far off (usually due to the student not necessarily pushing themselves as far as they could), it's not often I receive submissions that are this clearly demonstrative of patience and care. You've taken it to a whole new level, and I can only imagine just how much time you've invested into each and every construction. I'll tell you right now - you've done an excellent job, and I will be marking this lesson as complete.

Starting with your form intersections, aside from a few slightly wobbly lines where you may not have leveraged the ghosting method as much as you could have (like with this box down here) you've shown clean, consistent linework, and a solid grasp of how these forms interact with one another in 3D space. Your cylinders in boxes are similarly well done, and you're checking them after the fact very thoroughly with the line extensions in order to ensure that you're identifying where your approach can continue to be adjusted and improved.

Continuing onto your form intersection vehicles, you've clearly understood in its entirety what this exercise is meant to be. Many students - no doubt because I haven't worded something as well as I could have - confuse this exercise to be far more than it is, but it's precisely what you've done here. Taking the form intersections exercise and simply arranging those simple primitives into the layout of a car, so as to remind us that what we're working with are not individual, separate edges, laid out along a grid within our bounding box, but complete primitive forms, constructed as full volumes and not individual components stitched together.

Getting to the meat of the lesson, the sheer thoroughness with which you've approached this work has really been taken to the extreme. On that note alone, if I were the hiring manager of a game studio, I'd probably hire you on the spot regardless of what the position was. This willingness to take your time, to go through the steps one by one, and to just commit as much time as is needed - not on the basis of your own feelings, but on the basis of what the work itself demands - is incredibly important and something one does not find in people all that often. It is however the secret to success - the willingness to do what needs to be done. Sure, there's a lot of luck involved as well, but it's not just arbitrary luck. Opportunities come and go, and often we don't even notice them, because we either don't have the skills necessary to take advantage of them, or because the skills we'd need to develop are simply too daunting to imagine taking on. This resilience you're showing here is the difference.

Taking it further, the couple of instances - specifically this construction and this one - where you ended up way off in terms of proportion, only serve to demonstrate your skills and tenacity even further. You did not scrap it, you did not give up, you held to the process and saw it through - and the result is still objects that, though we know them to be way off base proportionally, still look solid and tangible. As though you'd merely faithfully captured something that was built incorrectly.

Now, I will point out as shown here that the reason those proportions were off was likely because the constructing-to-scale approach was unfortunately applied incorrectly. The contact point line going off to the right was correct, but the vertical contact point was off, as was the minor axis.

And that about covers it! As if I haven't said this enough already - you've done a fantastic job, and you should be very proud of what you've achieved here. I'll go ahead and mark this lesson, and the course along with it, as complete. Congratulations!

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
8:56 PM, Monday January 16th 2023

Thank you so much for your feedback! I have really put a lot of time into each study and tried learning from my mistakes as I went. I'm very happy that the effort is visible in the final result.

Thank you once more for your critique and for this course, it is one of the best ones out there.

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