6:59 PM, Wednesday September 29th 2021
Starting with your super imposed lines, your work here is coming along fairly well, although it definitely would have been better to start out with the shorter lines and work your way up to the longer ones (as shown in the video/instructions for this exercise) - this would have helped you ease into it.
As this exercise is all about getting into the flow of executing marks confidently and fluidly, the fraying on the far right is fairly normal and expected. It shows that you are more and more willing to commit to the trajectory of a given stroke, rather than trying to steer it during the execution (which would result in a wobblier line).
Continuing onto your ghosted lines and planes, while both exercises were completed quite well, I can see a greater tendency to hesitate in your planes. The ghosted lines themselves are almost completely straight and smooth, and while you do overshoot here and there, you're not holding yourself back out of fear of missing the mark. When you get into the ghosted planes, you do hesitate a little more, showing that you're prioritizing the accuracy of the marks over their fluidity. That is a priority you need to shift in your mind - always make sure that no matter what, when you reach the execution phase of the ghosting method, you push through and commit to the motion you've planned out and prepared.
As a side note, in the ghosted lines exercise you were definitely drawing the dots to be pretty enormous - they don't need to be quite so huge. In fact, they only need to be just big enough for you to see them. Making them smaller, and allowing the strokes to swallow them up, will be far more useful when it comes to employing this technique throughout the course.
Moving onto your ellipses, these are coming along well. You're achieving even, consistent shapes and committing with confidence to each ellipse upon executing it. While there certainly are some that come out a bit loose, that is something that will improve as you continue to practice these exercises in your warmups. They primarily loosen up when they get larger or when the degree of the given ellipse gets particularly wide - all of which are well known for being more difficult. Ultimately there's nothing wrong with your trajectory here - just be sure to keep practicing these exercises as you move forwards, and always remind yourself to employ the ghosting method/execute the ellipses from your shoulder using your whole arm, and you'll continue to smooth out any issues.
Jumping down to your rough perspective boxes, there are a few things that stand out here as issues:
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While the video for this exercise and the example page provided on the written instructions have students drawing multiple frames for this exercise (each with their own distinct horizon line, vanishing points, sets of boxes, etc.) you appear to have only drawn one large one per page, with no frame. You appear to have done the same thing for the plotted perspective exercise as well. While this isn't a huge concern in the context of this exercise, any situation where a student opts to do something differently than shown in the instructions raises questions as to why - was it a conscious decision, or was the student not actually aware (perhaps they didn't go through the instructions as mindfully as they could have, in which case what else might have been missed?)
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It seems to me that you're not employing the ghosting method for your lines here. I'm not seeing any points marked out for your start/end of each stroke, and I'm also seeing a greater tendency to go back over your marks multiple times instead of investing your time in the planning/preparation of one stroke per line. The ghosting method must be employed for every mark we do throughout this course (aside from textural marks). Furthermore, you should not be giving into the temptation to go back over linework you've already drawn - be it to correct a mistake, or reflexively reinforce a line. You get one shot at a given line.
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When you go back to check the accuracy of your estimations, it seems that you apply the lines in red incorrectly. You seem to be drawing a line from the front-most point right back to the VP. That is not what was demonstrated in the instructions - instead, you should be taking each line as you've drawn it, and extend it back to find where it intersects with the horizon line. This allows us to see more clearly how far off we were with each estimate, given that we can see the distance between that intersection and the actual VP.
Now, as far as the rest of the exercise goes, you're doing fine. It is expected that students' estimates here will be off by a fair margin. The only real problems that come up here are whether or not you're following the instructions themselves, as they're provided. This continues to hold true for the remainder of your work through this lesson.
Moving onto your rotated boxes and organic perspective boxes, it's not that they're done particularly badly (in terms of what is expected for this stage at the beginning of the course), but that you're not doing everything that's asked. Again, you haven't used the ghosting method here. Moreover, you neglected to complete the corner boxes in the rotated boxes exercise, leaving each quadrant unfinished.
These last two exercises are especially not ones I expect students to do amazingly with - they're very challenging, and demand a lot. My only expectation as part of Lesson 1 here is that students give the exercises their best shot. Not that they complete the exercises correctly and without mistakes, but that they do complete them, adhering to the instructions.
I'm going to assign a few additional pages of revisions below, so you can address the issues that I've called out above.
Next Steps:
Please submit:
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1 page of rough perspective boxes
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1 page of rotated boxes