Lesson 2: Contour Lines, Texture and Construction

11:02 PM, Wednesday August 4th 2021

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I needed a lot longer for these homeworks nowadays cause I'm going to work again. I hope to get back into a regular habit of doing the lessons and just drawing.

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1:15 PM, Saturday August 28th 2021
edited at 1:16 PM, Aug 28th 2021

hi there i'll be handling this critique and hopefully i'll be able to provide a helpful and on-point feedback

also hopefully you're able to get back to sharpening this skill, but if you find yourself taking a very long time away from this that's completely fine and if you're returning back from it then you can just do some exercises from the exercises that you've tackled and return back here although i'm saddened that it took a long time for someone to respond and give you a critique, if you find time you can join the discord server and participate as there are a lot of active users who are willing to help one another(https://discord.com/invite/FtSS4hhqSu) and you can also get your submission critiqued faster whenever you've done atleast 5 critiques as mentioned in the #critique-exchange channel in discord

  • now starting off with your arrows you've done a pretty good job determining the flow for each arrow, but one common issue that i've found is that there are times where your arrows are pinching/bulging as it moves through space, keep in mind that as the arrows move forward to the viewer we want to be consistent on gradually making it wider but in you're first and 2nd page you've done another good job as you've included arrows that are foreshortened and arrows that overlapped more. another thing that could be worth mentioning is the use of your lineweight, although it's good that you're adding lineweight to reinforce the solidity of the arrow more, try to apply lineweight subtly by just adding 1 line and no more than that, here are things that you need to be mindful of, but with mileage you'll soon be consistent of it.

  • now onto your organic forms w/ contour lines/ ellipses i've seen you cross out some of the sausages in the 4th sausage at page 1 and below the 8th sausage in page 2, try not to hide your mistakes as making mistakes are completely fine and you'll learn greatly from it, and as one user mentioned to me:"here in drawabox we don't hide our mistakes instead we try to work with it". so the first common issue that i've found is that you aren't making your sausages simple https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/simplesausage but you'll get better with mileage, one method that was shared in the community that might help you is by ghosting the sausage first then drawing it before drawing the flow line, and if you're confident already try to do the opposite by drawing the flow line first then draw the sausage. i'll commend you for drawing the 3 different orientations as well as experimenting with the degree of the ellipse and contour lines, so great work!

  • onto your texture exercises, so far, for your texture analysis you've done a great job applying the transition from dense to sparse in the 3rd panel but in the dissections there is barely no transition form dense to sparse, remember that we want to work on the implicit side rather than the explicit side since we don't want to give the viewer overwhelming detail that could become visually noisy, more on the subject matter here. i'd also like to direct you to this image here, it shows that when we're working with a very thin cast shadow , if we outline and fill it in we will get a much more dynamic shadow shape rather than a simple static line.

  • now to your form intersections, it's pretty common if you don't feel like you get this yet since you'll later be able to understand it on the upcoming lessons and as you get better you'll greatly improve your spatial reasoning skills, but for now if you feel like you fall in this category it's perfectly fine so don't beat yourself too hard, although some of your intersections are solid and quite believable and you've also maintained shallow foreshortening in your forms so that's good!

  • lastly onto your organic intersections for the first page on the top left sausage it seems that it's slithering on the bottom sausage rather than it wrapping and the cast shadow for it looks like its not really resting on a form but it looks more like it's on the very back page, try to maintain a consistent light source so that you can avoid cast shadows that could contradict on what you're creating as the illusion of 3d in a 2d plane but in the 2nd page you seem to be getting the gist of the lesson as more sausages that you did wrap around one another although the middle sausage seems to be flying rather than it wrapping around another form but the cast shadow is still a problem so it might help if you draw a small sun anywhere on the page so you can determine your light source

anyways this is a pretty solid submission although there are things that you can still improve, there is no doubt that you understand the purpose for each exercise, don't forget to include these exercises in your warm-up pool, so good luck on lesson 3! if you feel like you misunderstood something feel free to tell it here and i'll try my best to answer it

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edited at 1:16 PM, Aug 28th 2021
10:30 PM, Monday August 30th 2021

Thank you for the critique, it was very helpful to hear that, especially the advice and tips you gave me. I hope to be able to improve on a lot of the points you make like using line weight properly or not cluttering my page in too much visual noise and cast shadows.

7:05 AM, Tuesday August 31st 2021

i'm glad to hear that it was helpful, and if you don't mind me asking have you done the 250 box challenge yet? i don't see it on your sketchbook, but anyways if you considered it yet you can join the discord community so that many helpful users(including me) may help you as you go forward on your drawabox journey

4:26 PM, Monday November 22nd 2021

Oh I actually have xD but I comepletely forgot to post it before doing Lesson 2, so I will definitely post it today (sorry for responding that late, I haven't paid much attention to the notification tab for a while)

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