zularka

On your arrows, I LOVE the flow and fluidity of your lines. In future, I think you could work on adding in some shading and implement more line weight. You could also exaggerate the foreshortening more so they move even more dramatically through space. Here is an example of foreshortening I received in my critique and here is an example for line weight.

Moving on to your organic forms with contours, I think you have added more circles than needed to define the form. Your forms are also a bit too long, which leads to pinching in some cases or more curves than there should be for a simple sausage form. You're your line work here looks confident which is good. I'd recommend that you try and shift the degree of your contours more. (Pulled from my official critique: The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer. As we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

Your texture analysis is extremely detailed which is a bit overwhelming. I think I'd like to feel the gradient from dark to very light and sparse more. I think that would also give the eye places to rest and draw the gaze to the busier/darker sections.

For the Dissections, overall, I think you've got a sense of how to detail textures. For points of improvement, I would like you to have a starker gradient. Because everywhere is dark and highly detailed, each texture is demanding attention. I would also like you to push your silhouettes more to give a stronger initial impression of each texture. Otherwise, good work and I think things will even out with more practice and application of the different things I've mentioned.

On Form Intersections, your forms look fairly solid and convincing. It does look as though you skipped a few intersections (didn't draw them). I'm also somewhat confused by some of the intersections as I struggle to see how some of the shapes would intersect in the way shown. For that reason, I would like to assign an additional 1 page of form intersections as revisions.

To wrap up with the organic intersections exercise, like me at this stage, you need a bit more time and practice to be think of how these sausages interact in 3D space (e.g. how they'd wrap around one another.) Try not to leave gaps between forms. I also recommend trying to stack your forms perpendicularly rather than keeping them headed in the same direction. This will make wrapping them around one another a smoother task. Some of your forms are also pinching, so I think having a more consistent shape and size will yield better results. For your shadows, I'd recommend pushing them more so they feel like cast shadow and not arbitrarily placed. You may also want to think of where the light source is located. You can place your light source at the top left or right corner of the page to start with as it might be easier than working with a light directly above your form pile. For this, too, I would like to assign 1 page of revisions for these.

Hmm, I think if the lines are shaky at the beginning and/or end, that probably means you slow down or lose confidence at some point during the stroke. You have to maintain the drawing speed and commit to each line. My lines usually waver when I start second-guessing myself at some point. Which line warm-ups have you mostly been focusing on? I would say maybe do a bit more of the ghosted lines as that helps with drawing more confident lines.

As far as whether to keep focusing on lines or move on, I'd say move on. Uncomfortable assigns the amount of homework pages necessary to get you started in the right direction. Doing many more practice pages just tends to reinforce bad habits and lead to burnout.