tiamal

Giver of Life

The Indomitable (Summer 2022)

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  • The Indomitable (Summer 2022)
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    11:48 AM, Wednesday August 10th 2022

    Hello!

    Congratulations on getting through the box challenge!

    Now on to the critique:

    Overall the lines on your boxes look really well drawn! The only few instances I saw your lines curve slightly were in the cases like box no. 200 where it's barely showing. Considering the quality of your lines in most of the cases though I'd remind you to just take time to draw each line as carefully. When it comes to hatching, few things I'd like to point out is that: 1) The lines should be kept within the bounds of the plane. You should try to keep overshooting to minimum. Starting the lines outside the bonds of the plane is also something to be avoided. I saw this in box no. 95 for example. 2) The hatching lines should also be parallel to each other. For example in the box no. 61 the hatching seems distracting. You have done a really good job with hatching in the box no.1 though.

    The perspective in your boxes seems to have steadily improved over the challenge. in the beginning I saw some diverging in your lines but later on your boxes seem to be converging. By converging I mean boxes like no. 27 where the downward pointing lines are diverging. Later on I see singular lines that are diverging like in the box no. 173 the left-most blue line.The rest of the box seems to be converging correctly though. A way to combat this is thinking about the relationships between the lines and constructing the box based on that. I think this is well demonstrated in ScyllaStew's video for the challenge where she plots everything down before drawing any planes. Another place where thinking about the relationships between all the lines would benefit the construction would be cases like box no. 185 where the blue lines are converging but they are converging at two separate points. Instead you should try and keep in mind that all the four blue lines should meet at one point and how that affects all the lines. A way to help you think about the relationships could be changing the order in which you draw your boxes.

    Parallel lines is also a mistake you should try to avoid. In the box no. 204 you have drawn converging lines well on two sides but the blue lines seem to be be parallel to each other. Also, despite two lines being close to together thus becoming more and more parallel with each other they should still be converging. For instance, in the box no. 215 the two blue lines close to each other seem to be parallel with each other. I saw this in some other boxes as well so try to avoid it when moving on. In the box no. 220 you don't have this problem.

    In the future I'd like you to keep in mind the things I pointed out when doing warm-ups. Overall though you have done an amazing job with the challenge! You can also take look at the advanced box exercises and start practicing them.

    I'll go ahead and mark this lesson complete. Great job!

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    5:54 PM, Wednesday June 29th 2022

    thank you! it's albedo from genshin impact

    9:02 PM, Tuesday June 7th 2022

    Thank you so much for the critique! This is really helpful!

    8:56 PM, Tuesday June 7th 2022

    Glad to be of help!

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    4:39 PM, Monday June 6th 2022

    Hello!

    Congratulations on getting through your first lesson!

    Now to the critique:

    Lines: Your lines look good in that they are confident and smooth: I don't see any wobbling. Your lines do seem to curve though so remember to use your shoulder when drawing. If you find that your lines always curve in same direction, you could also try to intentionally curve your lines to the opposite direction to even the lines out and make them straight. In the super imposed lines there should be no fraying on both ends. One thing to mention as well is that you should never redraw a line. No matter how badly it goes.

    Ellipses: Your ellipses look good overall. They seem to be confidently drawn and they are smooth. They are also mostly evenly shaped. Your accuracy is off but that doesn't matter at this stage. For future reference though the things I would mention is that in the tables of ellipses the ellipses should be kept within bounds and they shouldn't overlap with each other. In the ellipses in planes the ellipses should touch all the four sides of the planes and in the funnels the minor axis should cut the ellipses into two symmetrical halves. Not meeting this criteria is completely normal though as accuracy improves overtime as you practice.

    Boxes: Your plotted perspective looks nice! In the rough perspective something to keep in mind is that the width lines should be parallel to the horizon line and height lines perpendicular to the horizon line. The rotated boxes exercise is also well done. Although, why has it not been completed fully? I won't make you do the exercise again but I would highly suggest you complete it before doing anything else. The organic perspective looks good!

    Overall you have done a good job with your homework. You can address the things I mentioned in your warm ups. You are free to move on to the 250 box challenge, well done!

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    2:11 PM, Monday June 6th 2022

    Hello!

    Congratulations on getting through your first lesson!

    Critique:

    Lines: Overall your lines look nice: they are smooth and confident. Some things to keep in mind though: In the super imposed lines there should be no fraying on both ends instead you should always start from the same dot. In some of your lines I see slight wobbling and curving. To fix this remember to use ghosting method enough times until you are confident to execute your lines. When executing the lines, always use your shoulder to draw smooth, straight and confident lines. In the ghosted lines exercise I see little bit curving right at the end of the line so that the line connects your starting and ending dot. However accuracy should not be your first priority as it improves overtime. Accuracy should also be achieved through the ghosting method. Lastly, remember to not redraw any lines, no matter how badly they go.

    Ellipses: Your ellipses look also really nice: they look to be confident and smooth! Something to keep in mind though is the shape, try to keep them evenly shaped all around by drawing them with your shoulder and keeping the speed constant when drawing. Your accuracy is still little off but nothing to worry about as it too will improve overtime. Things to keep in mind for the future are though: In the tables of ellipses your ellipses should be kept within the bounds and not overlap with other ellipses. Also, the ellipses next to each other should have the same degree. In the ellipses in planes your ellipses should touch all four sides of the planes. In the funnels the minor axis should cut the ellipses into two symmetrical halves.

    Boxes: Your plotted perspective exercise is really well done! Nothing to point out there. Your rough perspective exercise looks good as well. The boxes' width lines seem to be parallel to the horizon line and height lines perpendicular to the horizon line, which is extremely good! Good job on that! In the rotated boxes, the boxes further back need to be rotated further. Your organic perspective looks nice!

    Overall you have done a great job. You can address the things I mentioned in your warm ups but other than that you are free to move on to the 250 box challenge. Also, please do not rush these assignments: it will only hinder your learning.

    Well done your first lesson!

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    7:06 PM, Sunday June 5th 2022

    Hello!

    Congratulations on getting through your first lesson!

    Critique:

    Lines: Your lines look really neat! In the later sections there are however lines that wobble so remember to ghost enough times before executing your lines and use your shoulder to draw confident and smooth lines. You should never redraw a line either! Your lines seem to be accurate but remember it shouldn't be your first priority.

    Ellipses: Your ellipses look really nice! They seem to be drawn confidently and smoothly and are evenly shaped, which is thhe most important thing, Your accuracy is slightly off: in the ellipses in planes in some cases your ellipses don't touch all the sides of the planes and in the funnels ellipses not perfectly aligning to the minor axis, but that is completely normal and nothing to worry about. To improve in accuracy ghost enough times before drawing the ellipse.

    Boxes: Your exercises from this section are also done really well! The only thing I would mention is that in the rough perspective try to keep the width lines parallel to the horizon line and height lines perpendcular to the horizon line.

    Overall your exercises have all been done very well! The few things I mentioned you can address in your warm ups. You are free to move on to the 250 box challenge. Great job!

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    6:45 PM, Sunday June 5th 2022

    Hello!

    Congratulations on getting through your first lesson!

    Critique:

    Lines: Remember that your lines shouldn't wobble nor should they arch. So remember to always use the ghosting method until you are confident enough in your lines and then execute it confidently using your shoulder. Accuracy shouldn't be your first priority. In the super imposed lines there should be no fraying on both ends.

    Ellipses: Your ellipses look mostly smooth and evenly shaped, which is good! Your accuracy is little off: in ellipses in planes the ellipses should be touching all the sides of the planes and in the funnels the minor axis should cut the ellipse in two symmetrical halves. However as with lines accuracy should not be your first priority, instead the most important thing is that the ellipses are drawn confidently and smoothly using your shoulder and are evenly shaped.

    Boxes: All of your exercises in this section are really well done! The only thing I would point out is that in the rough perspective the width lines should be parallel to the horizon line and the height lines should be perpendicular to the horizon line.

    Overall you have done a great job! You can address the things I mentioned in your warm ups but other than that you are free to move on to the 250 box challenge. Well done!

    Also, if you need any clarification to anything I have said, feel free to ask!

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    6:22 PM, Sunday June 5th 2022

    Hello!

    Congratulations on getting through your first lesson!

    Now to the critique:

    Lines: Overall your lines look nice, smooth and confident. However I see some curving on your lines so remember to take time to draw each line thoroughly using the ghosting method and use your shoulder always when executing the lines. Also, in the superimposed lines I see a little bit of fraying on both ends so remember to start your lines from the same point.

    Ellipses: The accuracy in your ellipses is still off, which is completely normal, in the ellipses in planes exercise the ellipses should touch all the sides of the planes, in the tables of ellipses there should be no overlap between the ellipses and in the funnels the minor axis should cut the ellipses into two symmetrical halves. I am pointing out these for later reference. Your priority should be drawing smooth and confident ellipses. The thing I would focus on most is getting your ellipses to be evenly shaped. Accuracy develops overtime with practice.

    Boxes: Your plotted perspective exercise is done really well! The only minor thing I would point out is that your crosshatching has been applied to different facing planes on different boxes, which makes it visually little confusing. This however doesn't the perspective on the boxes which you have done correctly. In the rough perspective remember to keep the width lines parallel to the horizon line and height lines perpendicular to the the horizon line. In the rotated boxes, the boxes further from center aren't rotating enough. Organic perspective exercise is done well.

    Overall your exercises have been done well. The boxes section is hard for a reason and I wouldn't worry about those exercises. You can address the things I have mentioned in your warm ups but you are free to move on to the 250 box challenge. Good job!

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    8:13 PM, Saturday April 16th 2022

    Hello!

    Thank you so much for your critique! This was really helpful!!!

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